The Burial

Member since 2003 · Posted 8 Nov 2003 · 8 comments

Thick Black rain flowed From the windows of her soul As soil hit the rose.

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13 votes so far. Yours would make 14.13 votes so far

[9] fair12 8-Nov-03/6:04 AM Reply

I loved the dark melodrama of this piece. I give you a 9...

[10] ShaNoN+960317485 8-Nov-03/7:06 AM Reply

Amen...

[7] deleted user 8-Nov-03/1:58 PM Reply

thick things don't flow

and where did the rose come from

[n/a] horus8 8-Nov-03/3:21 PM Reply

Good form and attention to structure, but cliche imagery.

[10] sliver 9-Nov-03/9:31 AM Reply

I like it, the darkness of it seems to touch my soul somehow.10

[9] http://mulberryfairy 9-Nov-03/11:11 AM Reply

I liked it all except "windows of her soul", even though "soul" went with Black and soil. Maybe you could work in soul without the cliche.

[8] Bachus 16-Nov-03/1:37 AM Reply

Cliche, but honest.

[10] capachijim 18-Nov-03/3:38 PM Reply

love it -10-