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If I can't swim there I'll float

Member since 2002 · Posted 23 Dec 2003 · Edited 23 Dec 2003 · 2 comments

It's horribly lonely out here Floating on this charred seat Counting the fins of predators Wondering if I'm going to sunburn. It's terribly chilly out here Turning the clouds into smoke gods Measuring the buoyancy of salt to fresh Wondering if I should have ate those peanuts? The guy holding onto the toilet has long since disappeared, and I'm beginning to think that it might be a safer place too bob later. It's dreadfully reminding out here Black and yellow jacket stars. Perhaps, even whole galaxies... Tonight, I have a feeling. I'll probably freeze to death while getting there.

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[9] ShaNoN+960317485 27-Dec-03/5:28 AM Reply
more like you'd be crazy, cold and wishing you be dead.
[6] FreeFormFixation 29-Jul-08/3:04 AM Reply
eh