DetailsThe poem, its numbers, and the conversation.

A stitch

Member since 2003 · Posted 2 Jan 2004 · 5 comments

A stitch There is a hairline fracture You cannot see it without some scrutiny But, Iâm sure that it will make itself known The pain will drown you Outweighed only by fear You will submit with every rush of tidal torture And yet, it will not subside When your arches have been spiked at every step: When your hands do not withdraw from the too-hot dishwater: When that horrible pop song begins again for the millionth time And your bowels knot, And all connective tissue begins to snap strand By strand, by strandâ¦ You will wish you could redress your neglect. Of course, by then It will no longer be a hairline fracture.

Rate it

0 is the worst, 10 the best. Pick a number, add a comment if you like, then send it. Keys: 0–9 pick, Enter sends.

mean 4.75 weighted 4.97 rank 8429 views 258 View voting details →

4 votes so far. Yours would make 5.4 votes so far

5 comments

[n/a] richa 2-Jan-04/12:55 PM Reply

What about the opioids that null extreme pains when the pain is no longer adaptive?

[8] Shuushin › richa 2-Jan-04/6:24 PM Reply

oo oo - I just wrote this (like a week ago)!

<A Chemical Story>

Neurotransmitting friends:
my dynorphin, beta endorphin
and enkephalins.

Throughout the holidays, helping me;
reacting to the call of substance (P),
keeping me free of Marleyâs chains,
and various stress-induced pains.

Thereâs been many a party enjoyed
through my endogenous opioids;
from mu (both things 1 and 2) to epsilon
(theyâll visit with you from dusk till dawn).

Theyâre as dear as a table of Tiny Tims;
I love them each drug as a son -

God bless the little endorphins,
every one.

[8] Shuushin 2-Jan-04/6:28 PM Reply

some conjuringing? a curse? Have a snowman; eat his nose.

[n/a] Bill Z Bub 8-Jun-04/12:10 AM Reply

I really have been meaning to write you a letter, mang.

[4] nentwined 24-May-05/6:57 PM Reply

uses a few too many words, or perhaps the words it uses just aren't as effective as they could be. Simple statement, which in this case I think is good, but doesn't work for me. The horrible pop song reference in particular... Hmm. Make me _feel_ these things, describe them instead of name them, perhaps.