poemranker ::American Eden v.2 [revised] by SupremeDreamer

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American Eden v.2 [revised]

Member since 2003 · Posted 12 Jan 2004 · 5 comments

It isn't about how one man fails societies code of morality, blaming his drunken father and whore mother who were never home. It isn't about how another man follows a gentleman's code of honor, drilled into him since he was a toddler by his polite and decent mum. It isn't about how one was raised, or where they came from. It's about how the timid become entombed in self pity, too fearful to open rusted eyelids. It's about how warriors learn the art of making bricks from the ashes of war so they can build a skyscraper. It's about how our society transforms free spirits into slaves. It's about how we built a country of ghosts, applying their iron shackles immediately after birth and preparing them neatly to be returned to the earth unrealized and unfulfilled; buried not in an American Eden, but six feet under in our canonic hell.

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5 comments

[n/a] SupremeDreamer 12-Jan-04/12:23 PM Reply
Finally got around to giving this ole piece the face lift it desperately needed.
[9] horus8 12-Jan-04/12:30 PM Reply
Canonic... sweit.
[n/a] SupremeDreamer › horus8 12-Jan-04/12:40 PM Reply
The dictionary rocks. (and promises to provide hours of fun!)
[9] INTRANSIT 12-Jan-04/5:57 PM Reply
Definitely a wee bit-o-passion in this one.
[n/a] Don-Quixote › INTRANSIT 12-Jan-04/6:48 PM Reply
Oh yeah? check out Victory smokes & black tiger ambrosia.. I just posted it fresh from my dream lab. (Been crafting it most of the day.)