Free verse № 85581
Necromancers Song (Incubus Guitar & Buddhist Drums)
We traveled the sky,
along the winking stars
to reach the moons midnight bar
where ravens dance
in the exotic ivory glow--
There you played an incubus' guitar
to the beat of my buddhist drums
and the necromantic tune of the lead singer
glorifying the life of a rogue to the crowd;
A concert of wicked drollery-
where our songs were heard by souls
smoking hand-carved wooden pipes
or drinking their chosen poison--
The home where our questionable demeanor
was accepted, at times applauded
or draped with scorn.
Now the smoke has cleared,
the liquors been drained;
I listen to the silence
left by unconscious bodies
strewn across the floor-
wondering where we've gone
if anywhere--
Perdition or Elysium?
6 comments
you might consider using "among" the stars or even
"with" the stars- or "along with the winking stars."
Liked winking in there!
liquor's been drained (apostrophe- standing for the liquor has been drained). I really liked "the home where our questionable demeanor was accepted, at times applauded" and felt that was next sadly contradicted by "or draped with scorn"- maybe soften that with- or occasionally draped with scorn? Liked this very much, good capture of a scene- good question at the end!
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