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Black Snake

Member since 2004 · Posted 12 Feb 2004 · 7 comments

Bright lights, Lots of noise, Ground shaking, Sun baking. The lights getting brighter, The noise getting louder, The endless snake rushes by, Glistening in the baked sun. Wind pushes me away, I sit there and stare as the serpent Goes on forever, finally an end. And no more wind. All is quiet, Sun is hot, ground is still, and on I go. Suddenly, more shaking, more noise, No time to get out of the way. I look towards the sun, It burns my eyes, No more time for I am to die. “Please keep me safe, lord” I pray in my last seconds. The last thing I know, I look to see my death Staring me in the face and Charging at me. This time there was no wind To push me away, Good-B---------

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[8] zodiac 13-Feb-04/10:08 AM Reply
The word black followed by the word snake is so sexy to me.

Good-B------- is one of the silliest things done in poetry ever ever ever ever ever ever ever. I imagine you performing this, accompanying yourself with a dramatic reenactment. It would be fucking hilarious.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › zodiac 13-Feb-04/11:41 AM Reply
Is that because you're a connoisseur of pure Alabama blacksnake?
[8] zodiac › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 13-Feb-04/12:23 PM Reply
I wouldn't say connoisseur, no. But I like porn as much as the next guy.
[8] zodiac › zodiac 13-Feb-04/12:59 PM Reply
The words pure and Alabama do not strike me as particularly sexy. I'll give you a buffalo-head nickel if you've ever been there.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › zodiac 13-Feb-04/6:18 PM Reply
To Vietnam?
[8] zodiac › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 13-Feb-04/7:34 PM Reply
No, Alabama.
[8] plinkyponk 13-Feb-04/3:37 PM Reply
witty how it stops at the end