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Free verse № 91686

Choices in the Road

by Pervy Elf

Member since 2003 · Posted 25 Feb 2004 · 5 comments

the fork in the road; dividing, seperating. Me from you. Which path to take? happiness, ever fleeting. She keeps you, from me: being happy: with you. two choices, one decision. Which will you take? Her? Me? Quickly: always walking: further: from you; happiness. soon I will be gone: from you.

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[5] zodiac 26-Feb-04/5:38 AM Reply
I'd like to recommend the following revision:

Choices in the Road (Free verse) by Pervy Elf

Two roads diverged in a yellow wood,
And sorry I could not travel both
And be one traveler long I stood
Scratching my cock (which has a hood)
In its tangle of pubic undergrowth.
[7] richa 26-Feb-04/7:49 AM Reply
To express this sentiment should only take two sentences max.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › richa 26-Feb-04/12:06 PM Reply
By that logic, ev'ry one of my poemes should be condensed into a single word: hope.
[5] zodiac › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 26-Feb-04/12:30 PM Reply
nope.
[0] smlink84 › zodiac 26-Feb-04/8:37 PM Reply
hope in dope maybe?