Fly

Member since 2004 · Posted 17 Mar 2004 · 4 comments

She awoke in the darkness Her whole life in a box No memoirs in her head Everything lost Struggling to reach Striving to see Through all of the shadows Hoping to be free No memory of the past No memory of the power Only knowing cruelty Forcing her to cower Knowing only that light shines Outside of her box Will she choose to fly Or let all be lost?

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[7] richa 17-Mar-04/11:14 AM Reply

The rhythm of the the first verse I like.

The other verses are too predictable however and the rhyme cower with power is absurdly forced.

[3] fuzzylogicisatwat 18-Mar-04/1:06 PM Reply

A big stinking pile of pump.

[n/a] etherealmaiden › fuzzylogicisatwat 18-Mar-04/2:50 PM Reply

do i get a reason or are you just going to be rude?

[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › etherealmaiden 18-Mar-04/3:08 PM Reply

You'll get mainly rudeness on poemeranker. Rudeness and shit poetry. Rudeness, shit poetry and clog-dancing dunces who waste their time writing sarcastic replies to other people's comments. -10-