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Free verse № 94697

March Madness

Member since 2002 · Posted 22 Mar 2004 · Edited 22 Mar 2004 · 3 comments

If some thing could quell a great small despair clothed in worn grey corduroy, thick milk glasses, the kitchen string might pull more gently, leave less of a scar. A phone call in the center of day, too loud to ignore, wait for a morning with sun spots on her hot dish hands, a down blanket answers great tiny pains. Forehead lines on male movie men, photos taped next to the wine labels drunk those three weeks one day when her hair had more curl, a braid.

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3 comments

[7] deleted user 22-Mar-04/1:37 PM Reply
How is a despair both great and small, or a pain both great and tiny?
I have never seen a down blanket; maybe a quilt.
I see some good images here and feel some pain.
[7] richa 23-Mar-04/7:27 AM Reply
The verses don't seem to follow on, and I agree with hypatia on the great small thing.

A few nice descriptions in there.
[10] zodiac 23-Mar-04/8:55 AM Reply
Besides the previous comments, the only thing wrong with this is the title.