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Hologram glasses

Member since 2004 · Posted 3 Apr 2004 · Edited 4 Apr 2004 · 9 comments

Our first time up, we're all bound to make asses of ourselves, to overdo it some: a cowboy hat, plaid pants, those plastic glasses they used to sell at Future World. The fascists sure made it an issue, didn't they? Plum in sharp Italian-tailored suits, white asses swaddled damply in silk while the poor masses sit on dirty linens. Who'd keep mum in the face of such apparel? Thus, the glasses, hat and pants; and as the motorcade passes to step out of the crowd, right? - stretch a thrum- -ming voice out over them, knock them on their asses - and with what? You'll never know until the clash is done: some tinny-sounding guff, some dumb inconsequential squawk, while the fat-asses coolly discussing your death laugh over glasses of not-giving-a-fuck, your kid-sister, and rum.

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[10] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 3-Apr-04/3:19 PM Reply
Why is the entire poeme indented?

This doesn't really achieve the vague air of guffing claptrap that wheezes out of all good poetry. -2-
[10] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 4-Apr-04/4:37 PM Reply
If Ray Bradbury were to somehow transmute himself into a guff, this poeme would be the name of the guff. And that name is Jesu.
[n/a] zodiac › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 5-Apr-04/5:20 AM Reply
Alternate Endings:
(1) and your kid-sister's bum,
(2) and each other's cum,
(3) and Sharyn McCrumb.
[10] Stephen Robins 5-Apr-04/4:17 AM Reply
A swollen testicle of iniquity.
[n/a] zodiac 5-Apr-04/7:25 AM Reply
"HOLOGRAPHIC GLASSES - The Whole World Celebrates in Jewish when you look at any point of light through these glasses. Use them to look at asingle source of light such as light bulb or street illumination."

http://www.bariff.org/bariff/320192.html
[9] Shuushin 5-Apr-04/2:03 PM Reply
I laughed, I cried.

nice job.
[9] Shuushin 5-Apr-04/2:13 PM Reply
why didn't you just add a new poem instead of blowing this one away?
[n/a] zodiac › Shuushin 5-Apr-04/2:20 PM Reply
the 48-hour rule.
[9] Shuushin › zodiac 6-Apr-04/7:51 PM Reply
yeah... about that...