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Diary

Member since 2004 · Posted 5 Apr 2004 · 6 comments

Place ink upon the paper, to solidify your thoughts. The tears make the color run, and add texture to your hands. There's nothing wrong with hoping but dreams die hard and fast. So place the book upon the table, and believe in what you have. I know you're scared, of the monsters in your room. They're only here for Christmas, and maybe New Years Day. Don't beg them for their mercy, they have no more to give. So burn that wretched tome, it's not really who you are. Compressed thoughts give hope to the notion that life can be placed on a page.

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[n/a] wilco 5-Apr-04/8:49 PM Reply

This used to have a cool little off kilter structure but the poemranker submit box would'nt let me do it....stupid poemranker submit box.....

[n/a] Shuushin › wilco 7-Apr-04/7:53 AM Reply

try pasting it into notepad first; I've been able to make indented poems without too much probs.

Pretty much the only thing it won't let you do is bold, etc. (and indent the first line).

[n/a] wilco › Shuushin 7-Apr-04/8:03 PM Reply

It was just the way I had it indented....In Word, every line was indented a tab space past the previous one in a sideways V pattern with the (Haiku?) thingie in the middle....but, alas, it was not meant to be so the hell with it.

[10] daveslady 6-Apr-04/12:09 AM Reply

saw the original typed way, very cool man. The poem is a great to think about things

[9] deleted user 6-Apr-04/10:54 AM Reply

I find the Poemranker submit box, and most everything else about the site, very conducive to our craft, given http limitations.

I'm with you on this right up to "compressed thoughts." It seems to be saying that journaling is a good thing, which many of us think it is. Second to living, it's quite satisfying.

[8] edpeterson 12-Apr-04/6:53 AM Reply

i think it is pretty damn good. simple. ONly just shy of elegant.