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The Flame

Member since 2004 · Posted 18 Apr 2004 · 9 comments

The fire consumes me, It is all around, I cry for help, But no one hears, So slowly I die, In pain, And alone, The Flame.

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9 comments

[7] deleted user 18-Apr-04/8:44 PM Reply

Now maybe you've swung too far into vagueness. That's ok, you seem to get better with each new poem.

[2] sarah 18-Apr-04/9:10 PM Reply

sorry - didn't like it. need to elaborate or something i think. diggin the concept but it didn't pack enough punch (in my very humble opinion).

just being real. hope not to offend you know...

[2] oftherealm 19-Apr-04/12:16 AM Reply

yo poem needs help, too simplistic

[7] edpeterson 19-Apr-04/9:04 AM Reply

better than smoke inhalation, which is more than i can say for many of the others.

[n/a] Fear of Garbage 19-Apr-04/11:03 AM Reply

This is really boring, but at least it wasn't long.

[6] Shuushin 19-Apr-04/3:09 PM Reply

no. When I like the user name more than the poem, something is broken.

[7] deleted user 21-Apr-04/7:00 PM Reply

hey, this has something to it. Not sure what it is. Ilike the shortness and the despair of it. keep at it.

[10] zodiac › deleted user 21-Apr-04/7:49 PM Reply

A flawlessly-performing tripe-detector.

[1] Edna Sweetlove 13-Aug-06/5:58 PM Reply

And you deserve to die after penning this tripe.