nentwined26 Dec 2005

If you really want more detail, a) read the definition of a pimple poem; b) the rhyme scheme is hackneyed, nearly impossible to do well; c) the rhythm is off just about everywhere; d) your english is broken ("he taught she is ugly"?) e) you twist the word order to fit the rhymes you want

Most of us have written stuff this bad. It's okay. You cannot improve this poem. Put it behind you and move on.