-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.16 Aug 2002

I'd drop the second line (lol! "I thank you"). Or at least change it. I don't think fish 'wriggle'. I'm also not too sure about the part about the saplings 'trying to reach up'. I'm not sure that writing about saplings struggling to grow is very relevant. Though I suppose if it helps describe the scene then leave it. I don't know really. Other than that I thought it was quite a good poeme.