Re: A wicked rose grows in God's grapevine. by SupremeDreamer	zodiac 152.30.60.207	31-Mar-04/3:16 PM
This is almost exactly the same poem as your last one, only not as good. I'd understand if you were trying to perfect the form, but then I'd be obliged to tell you you're not doing it very well.
Re: Over Simplification by Richard	zodiac 152.30.60.207	31-Mar-04/3:25 PM
Since joining poemranker, I've often noticed a tendency among posters criticized for writing cliches to make all their following posts entirely out of polysyllables, and I was wondering if you could explain to me why that is. All you've got now is a thesaurus-dependent gabble that would be absolutely hilarious read aloud, in addition to being (admittedly) about nothing or nothing new. The best line of this is made of common one- and two-syllable words. I bet you won't guess which one I mean.
regarding some deleted poem...	tadpole 67.31.158.170	31-Mar-04/5:15 PM
:) you have heart
regarding some deleted poem...	tadpole 67.31.158.170	31-Mar-04/5:17 PM
when are you gonna post a new poem already??? You can't tell me that you don't have any new ones because I wouldn't believe it
Re: I Married an Infectious Woman (My Love, 'Futility') by SupremeDreamer	Shuushin 207.5.211.177	31-Mar-04/5:33 PM
I like "mayhaps". I guess I'm not much into more ass humor at the moment. It goes together well enough.
Re: Bread Wine And Chocolate by Caducus	Shuushin 207.5.211.177	31-Mar-04/5:34 PM
A reference to easter?
Re: Watching The Rose Grow by Blindpoetry	Blindpoetry 68.106.171.15	31-Mar-04/5:36 PM
- I guess I forced rhyming to much... But everything sounded so much in tune to the rhythm I have in my head. So, I'm keeping it. And I also love what I wrote about. It's not sad, not angery, but a bit happy. Almost, but not to much into the happy mix. Just right outside the door. - But I wrote this in a cheery mood, so... what does that have to say?
Re: Darkness Falls On Tenement Twelve by Mona Lisa	Shuushin 207.5.211.177	31-Mar-04/5:37 PM
I will like this so much more when it has the word "concrete" in it only once. Watch your preposition use; too much - especially with so many conjunctions (but/yet). Pretty solid sentiment just the same though.
Re: A country called Cha by richa	Shuushin 207.5.211.177	31-Mar-04/5:49 PM
Richa mein freund - I grow familiar with your Australian abstractions; good stuff. nits- "beared"? bore? "entered the picture" - seems like a missed poetic opportunity.
Re: Ideals drown Worries by skaskowski	Shuushin 207.5.211.177	31-Mar-04/5:53 PM
well done - okay, I don't like "sticky" with "Stuck". Have a ten anyway.
Re: stains by calliope	Shuushin 207.5.211.177	31-Mar-04/6:02 PM
Pretty nice, calliope. This is an entirely different style (etc.), but have you read "the old fools" by philip larkin? http://plagiarist.com/poetry/?wid=4879 oh, I just read baughworm's crit on the title - agreed.
regarding some deleted poem...	Shuushin 207.5.211.177	31-Mar-04/6:06 PM
Good thought.
Re: Twilight Affair by thepinkbunnyofdoom	Shuushin 207.5.211.177	31-Mar-04/6:12 PM
"opera of obscenities" - nice. Yes, an edit once the emotion has leveled out a bit would be good for it; a nice distillation.
Re: Eyes by tre	Shuushin 207.5.211.177	31-Mar-04/6:16 PM
couple typos to fix, i think (intentional or not). Kindof a different slant on an old theme; kudos.
regarding some deleted poem...	Shuushin 207.5.211.177	31-Mar-04/6:22 PM
have a 10.
Re: Watching The Rose Grow by Blindpoetry	wilco 24.176.102.131	31-Mar-04/6:37 PM
You did fore the rhyme, but still it flows well.
Re: A Dangling Poo by zodiac	Spindle 152.163.252.168	31-Mar-04/7:18 PM
I was going to be nice and give you a one, but that gay comment lost you another point. If you're going to have some random, unintelligent statement like that in your poetry, you should at least have the decency to make it a somewhat good poem.
Re: A Dangling Poo by zodiac	wilco 24.176.102.131	31-Mar-04/7:22 PM
dude......
Re: metaphor by jsd	Shuushin 207.5.211.177	31-Mar-04/7:53 PM
a lyric. Tangled is better than mixed, anyday. welcome.
Re: The Hell With Growing Up by wilco	Shuushin 207.5.211.177	31-Mar-04/8:01 PM
I think it represents a good snapshot of a frame of mind in the moment just before one "grows up" (whatever that is) - this exact feeling. You may be surprised, and perhaps relieved, to know that there is still a bit to go and you won't spend your entire life wishing for misspent youth. As a slight aside, there is a recent study where folks aged 65 and older were asked what their favorite age was - 40-41 was the most cited result.