regarding some deleted poem...	some deleted user 81.178.225.255	4-Mar-04/1:02 AM
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regarding some deleted poem...	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 212.219.223.138	4-Mar-04/12:49 AM
Hi fuzzylogic! Welcome to the site!!1 Great name! Are you a fan of the work of Susan Haaaack?
regarding some deleted poem...	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	4-Mar-04/3:54 AM
Well, the first two lines of the third verse are a compltete rip off of John Lennon. however as the general theme of this poem is that you are such a happy go lucky chap you won't be to offended when I state: This poem is male ejaculent on the side of a lesbians face ergo ipso facto not needed on this site.
regarding some deleted poem...	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 131.111.212.215	4-Mar-04/5:30 AM
Excellent! I agree, people always seem to want you to change, or to criticise you for being who you are. Sometimes I just feel like standing up and shouting, "CAN'T YOU SEE I WILL ALWAYS JUST BE ME?" lol :-) -10-
Re: The Ultimate Survivor by Joe-joe	INTRANSIT 64.12.96.71	4-Mar-04/7:18 AM
You chose eddie for a subconcious reason. I saw a baby in the womb when I read this. (An) eddie being a swirling pool of water makes for an ideal name in this piece. Very good.
regarding some deleted poem...	fair12 66.84.225.2	4-Mar-04/12:13 PM
This is excellent - kudos to you. But, I like it as it is - all those semi-colons are annoying and take away from the simple beauty and soft voice of the poem.
Re: Windfarm by Nicholas Jones	zodiac 152.31.228.13	4-Mar-04/1:40 PM
This poem is good except for the overuse of 'as' sentence structures (because any use is overuse, since they are the most common sentence structures in web-published stuff,) and the phrase "transmissions of the news", which sounds really odd to my American ears. Also, have you thought of putting it in the past tense? I'm not bothered by the present, but I've been flipping through Poet's Market recently and seeing a lot of publishers' comments like 'Consider not submitting poems in the present tense' and so forth. Again, that's not such a serious criticism on my part, just a suggestion.
Re: A Dutch Peasant by richa	zodiac 152.31.228.13	4-Mar-04/1:44 PM
Great, as ever - though a little obviously a haiku (to me; maybe no one else will notice.) How important is it for you to stick to haiku form? Also, you're missing a semicolon (!) or period after lowlands.
regarding some deleted poem...	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 163.1.146.114	4-Mar-04/2:08 PM
"But the rages and disciplines are Fresh masterpieces in vivid oils running down Still wet upon the canvas of my memory." ...so hauntingly poignant. It reminds me very much of my childhood adventures at Browne Acres School For Boys, in which my stool-based oil paintings were met, even among the most mild mannered of my peers, with unprovoked acts of appalling violence.
Re: youre there... by PhSbLoNdE569	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 163.1.146.114	4-Mar-04/2:21 PM
This has to be a joke.
Re: To MY Mother by daveslady	d35 205.188.208.105	4-Mar-04/6:08 PM
nice kid
regarding some deleted poem...	some deleted user 24.222.81.233	4-Mar-04/6:59 PM
'Haps my glasses are the source of my problems.
regarding some deleted poem...	INTRANSIT 205.188.208.105	4-Mar-04/7:25 PM
Postings like this make me want to give up. I have absolutely nothing critical to say about this, and it wouldn't be coherent if I did. Fine work. Good night.
regarding some deleted poem...	some deleted user 24.222.81.233	4-Mar-04/8:12 PM
Is garci your maiden name?
Re: Torment by ThoughtfulSoul	daveslady 140.211.124.224	4-Mar-04/9:47 PM
damn!
Re: How to sleep sitting up by Bachus	daveslady 140.211.124.224	4-Mar-04/9:54 PM
made me sob. great way to capture the pain of a beautiful memory.
regarding some deleted poem...	fuzzylogic 172.174.74.48	4-Mar-04/10:01 PM
fuzzy logic: a superset of conventional (boolean)logic that has been inabled to handel the concept of partial truth! not 100% true but not 100% false, but i would rather you pick on my writing than my name
regarding some deleted poem...	daveslady 140.211.124.224	4-Mar-04/10:04 PM
I can pick up what your layin down.....in other words....I understand although I can't truly ever understand.
Re: An Infection in the Brain by GregDeEgg	daveslady 140.211.124.224	4-Mar-04/10:08 PM
its a wonder how you could so correctly write out the first thoughts of a woman when she finds out that she is with child. great
Re: waking up to fucking reality by d35	daveslady 140.211.124.224	4-Mar-04/10:17 PM
no words to describe how I feel. Thanks for sharing