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daniella 24.232.82.153 |
28-Feb-04/8:34 PM |
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this is where i would dwell... until your tears,
a million salty spheres,
rain cold upon the ground.
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| Re: Seven by toker071 |
daggatolar 216.139.165.12 |
28-Feb-04/7:10 PM |
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In the wildest of imagination, a queen would not stoop down to the "sand" to play with a dreamer and that is the very fun denid us for no longer being seven.
To call this very fun hell, is to lampoon the heaven e no longer can have with the "sand", simply becos we are grown ups
How I would want to be seven again and dream a queen who would take the sand for heaven.
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| Re: chlorinated by ThePariahDog |
daniella 24.232.82.153 |
28-Feb-04/7:55 PM |
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| Re: beef flavored ramen by ThePariahDog |
daniella 24.232.82.153 |
28-Feb-04/7:57 PM |
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ramen, a true staple i can warm to from my college days, instant satisfaction in neutral browns with little celebrations of veggies in bright re-hydrated hues.
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| Re: without you by ThePariahDog |
daniella 24.232.82.153 |
28-Feb-04/8:00 PM |
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dont tether yourself to rhyming... let go...
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| Re: godhead by ThePariahDog |
daniella 24.232.82.153 |
28-Feb-04/8:01 PM |
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there you go... gettin down and gritty
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| Re: real folk blues by ThePariahDog |
daniella 24.232.82.153 |
28-Feb-04/8:02 PM |
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i still see some clay here...
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| Re: Shark by cleverdevice |
unouluvme 209.110.217.87 |
28-Feb-04/5:25 PM |
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Not one of my favorites, but i suppose that is because i prefer darker, more, um...sensitive poetry.
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Schrodinger's Cat 63.147.55.19 |
28-Feb-04/5:27 PM |
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Excellent â I especially enjoyed your exceptionally well-placed and correctly used semicolon.
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| Re: Nude Reclining by cleverdevice |
unouluvme 209.110.217.87 |
28-Feb-04/5:30 PM |
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what exactly are you talking about?
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unouluvme 209.110.217.87 |
28-Feb-04/5:33 PM |
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For some reason this makes me laugh...
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| Re: simply missing by daggatolar |
unouluvme 209.110.217.87 |
28-Feb-04/5:35 PM |
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I like it, the no-spaced words are hard to read, ut its got a nice ring to it
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| Re: Standing Still by capachijim |
unouluvme 209.110.217.87 |
28-Feb-04/5:38 PM |
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is this 3 haikus? cause i think a haiku ONLY has 3 lines???
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| Re: How to sleep sitting up by Bachus |
unouluvme 209.110.217.87 |
28-Feb-04/5:41 PM |
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I really like this one. Not that i dont like it, but do the last lines work with the rest?
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unouluvme 209.110.217.87 |
28-Feb-04/5:44 PM |
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no wonder that this one is in the "best" category! Really nice.
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| Re: Oh No! by foothangingoutofass |
unouluvme 209.110.217.87 |
28-Feb-04/5:47 PM |
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1. this isnt exactly deep.
2. Your name seriously scares me
3. okay the rymes need some work
yeah, okay, i think a 1 will do.
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daggatolar 216.139.165.12 |
28-Feb-04/6:58 PM |
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vivid. The Eve's inheritance or better still the Eve's curse causing pain, bringing life on...this poem is a vivid picture
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| Re: advice by ThePariahDog |
daniella 24.232.82.153 |
28-Feb-04/8:05 PM |
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first utterings... tuff stuff... i know where this comes from, so i know where you can definitely take this wisdom you are scratching at.
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daniella 24.232.82.153 |
28-Feb-04/8:32 PM |
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correct and keen. i just would like to vibrate more... but this is the first i see of yours.
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| Re: Flies by Red_is_life |
fevriere 62.254.128.6 |
29-Feb-04/7:14 AM |
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"Loneliness" is spelt wrong. It's not poetic. Poetry is show, not tell.
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