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xxx 68.165.172.185 |
16-Feb-04/11:36 AM |
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Just as bad as the one before.
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| Re: The Prophetical Eye of Dreams by Don-Quixote |
Don-Quixote 204.31.179.62 |
15-Feb-04/4:40 PM |
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This is some quick scrawl that I wrote.. so no, it isn't something I put much effort into-- but I thought it might amuse or interest some.
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| Re: The birdboy that was (Icarus) by Y2kSlamPoet |
Shuushin 207.5.211.177 |
15-Feb-04/5:46 PM |
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This thought of icarus being converted to fuel some other thought or inspiration is a good one.
Would be worthy of a poem with it as a central theme. The idea of it can be used in other similar tales - like christ's body used as fertilizer, perhaps (would have to work around the logic problem of the whole stored in a cave thing, though).
As for the rest of this poem, it smacks of an attack on someone, though I don't think the reader is given a solid idea of who - a personal mission perhaps?
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Shuushin 207.5.211.177 |
15-Feb-04/5:47 PM |
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Shuushin 207.5.211.177 |
15-Feb-04/5:49 PM |
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| Re: The Prophetical Eye of Dreams by Don-Quixote |
Shuushin 207.5.211.177 |
15-Feb-04/5:52 PM |
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Very sexual. Freud would have a nice time with this.
the language is good, but I think "initiated" is better toned down as "started". The rest works, imho.
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| Re: First Shot by lastobelus |
Shuushin 207.5.211.177 |
15-Feb-04/5:55 PM |
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SupremeDreamer 204.31.168.198 |
15-Feb-04/11:20 PM |
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Honestly? I don't think this would be a good song...
You could have done better.
Blessed with three.
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some deleted user 67.165.254.252 |
15-Feb-04/11:27 PM |
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| Re: The Couch by BrandonW |
some deleted user 67.165.254.252 |
15-Feb-04/11:30 PM |
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some deleted user 67.165.254.252 |
16-Feb-04/12:05 AM |
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Haunting, eerie, beautiful.
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Nicholas Jones 137.44.1.200 |
16-Feb-04/6:52 AM |
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When did you last read The Waste Land?
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| Re: Insomnia by dreamsdiefirst |
Nicholas Jones 137.44.1.200 |
16-Feb-04/7:08 AM |
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There's nothing like a good poem about insomnia. And this is nothing like one. Bomm and, indeed, boom, as Basil Brush might say.
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| Re: Burn by XpunkXgirlX |
nothingtoanyone 63.183.224.203 |
16-Feb-04/9:59 AM |
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wow I could have related to this poem about two years ago but then I grew up and found out that sliding a knive across your arms is not the best way to feel sorry for yourself but anyway good poem.
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| Re: Dawns Blood Concealed by SupremeDreamer |
some deleted user 67.165.254.252 |
16-Feb-04/10:13 AM |
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heard all this type of crap a million times before, can't you be more original?
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xxx 68.165.172.185 |
16-Feb-04/10:35 AM |
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xxx 68.165.172.185 |
16-Feb-04/10:41 AM |
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xxx 68.165.172.185 |
16-Feb-04/10:51 AM |
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good perspective nice grate
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nothingtoanyone 63.183.232.98 |
16-Feb-04/11:20 AM |
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Thanks rockmage when people like what I wight it makes me want to wight more.
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nothingtoanyone 63.183.232.98 |
16-Feb-04/11:26 AM |
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I like this one...nice Jod lol
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