Re: Sprouts From the Jar by hatedestruction	Everyone 195.157.153.253	22-Jan-04/9:58 AM
Absolute tosh.
regarding some deleted poem...	basit_i 161.184.205.234	21-Jan-04/8:34 PM
Some of the rest doesn't quite fit with me, but "...beneath a canescent moon" and "for in death/ we are protean's pulse": of these i like.
Re: Drying, Cracked Roots by AnotherNothing	basit_i 161.184.205.234	21-Jan-04/8:36 PM
Hmm. The thoughts are well-held in the beginning and end, but the phraseology might have been a little more flexible in the middle-part.
regarding some deleted poem...	richa 81.178.229.177	22-Jan-04/5:15 AM
Third verse is not needed, we already know. And the rhyme gets a bit manic. The idea is good though.
Re: His Master's Jodhpurs by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	Tits 195.157.153.253	22-Jan-04/4:36 AM
Excellent! This reminds me very much of the work of Jeffrey Farnol.
Re: Sprouts From the Jar by hatedestruction	hatedestruction 167.196.165.47	22-Jan-04/10:17 AM
ahh.. at least you are ranking the poetry now, and not the person..
regarding some deleted poem...	hatedestruction 167.196.165.47	22-Jan-04/10:17 AM
haha, I agree.
regarding some deleted poem...	Christof 217.44.77.166	22-Jan-04/5:44 AM
See Hallmark cards
regarding some deleted poem...	Christof 217.44.77.166	22-Jan-04/5:46 AM
I like the rhyme scheme, it's actually quite cleveer and well worked out. But this self-pity thing is getting out of hand.
regarding some deleted poem...	richa 81.178.229.177	22-Jan-04/5:51 AM
I think to call the sands blasphemous you would have to be a canute as he thought he had control of parts of nature. Canescent moon - candescent, like a candle? The weight of water is a good idea but lighter than the burden of lost love is a bit too much. Still, overall an impressive use of language.
Re: At The Station by Christof	richa 81.178.229.177	22-Jan-04/5:56 AM
'Or the old dear collecting for terminal patients,' is not grammatical in the poem. It needs separating from 'either hustling for connections clause' which is talking about people plural. Other than that good, is the formaldehyde reference inspired by damien hirst?
Re: At my grandmother's aging sight by vulcan	hatedestruction 167.196.165.47	22-Jan-04/11:30 AM
"had a head I could break with a bang!" that's great!
Re: Drying, Cracked Roots by AnotherNothing	richa 81.178.229.177	22-Jan-04/5:59 AM
Personally I would say from an everything that exists in a place can not be said to be 'not meant to'. Even dead things.
Re: petal soft whispers by fair12	richa 81.178.229.177	22-Jan-04/6:02 AM
The alliteration is a bit of an annoyance in parts. But that is my only pick. Good stuff, plentiful
Re: P.M.S. by Princess_Snowflake	basit_i 161.184.196.195	22-Jan-04/6:35 AM
Mneh.
regarding some deleted poem...	Christof 217.44.77.166	22-Jan-04/6:51 AM
Shouldn't stanza 3 be a continuation of the sentence begun in 1 and 2? But I like this, it's clever and sinister.
Re: P.M.S. by Princess_Snowflake	hatedestruction 167.196.165.62	22-Jan-04/8:31 AM
I can't relate, but it's a good flow
regarding some deleted poem...	Shuushin 147.154.235.53	22-Jan-04/1:57 PM
So close...
regarding some deleted poem...	Christof 217.44.77.166	22-Jan-04/9:20 AM
Are you serious? 'Spill your dew'... Why be euphemistic? Why? And how inelegant is 'Romance is not what it is I need'? Is that even English? Eh? And I bet this goes straight to No. 1. Who votes for this stuff? ? ??? ? ?
Re: His Master's Jodhpurs by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	Christof 217.44.77.166	22-Jan-04/9:25 AM
Lovely. Like a ballad of yore. How gratifying to see the lower classes being kept in their rightful place, and in such spiffing rhyme too. Only in merrie Englande. What-ho.