| Re: The wise by richa |
INTRANSIT 205.188.208.105 |
3-Jan-04/12:52 PM |
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Liked the first run. This is better though.
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INTRANSIT 205.188.208.105 |
3-Jan-04/1:39 PM |
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Laid dung? He had sex with feces? Put this where it belongs. As an addendum to "child".
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| Re: Fireplay by drjhoss |
lastobelus 217.82.4.163 |
3-Jan-04/1:42 PM |
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ok, let me see if I got this: You (a slave with a master) were playing with matches under a lark's nest, the fire got a little out of hand and people started singing, their chorus drowning out the chirping of the lark as everyone rushed to and fro trying to put the fire out. You realized that once again you screwed up, because every time play with fire without your master's supervision, you accidentally set larks' nests on fire. You're so confused now that you forget how to get home so you hope your loving master will show up and show you the path so you can go home where he will care for you, but you're pretty sure he will make you crawl home begging.
Pardon me, but WHAT THE HELL are you TALKING about??? Are you, like, some kind of bdsm scene person who sets fires and then gets their "master" to spank them for it? Is this a fetish poem?
I don't get it.
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Blindpoetry 68.106.171.15 |
3-Jan-04/3:25 PM |
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uh.. unless I'm missing some hidden poetic part... I don't see why you posted this...
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| Re: Anniversary Poem by Blindpoetry |
Blindpoetry 68.106.171.15 |
3-Jan-04/5:10 PM |
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Written for my ex girlfriend as an anniversary present... and smashing Pumkins is her favorite band...
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| Re: Returneth by Patsy |
basit_i 161.184.192.81 |
4-Jan-04/12:05 AM |
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At this early hour, the poem's dichotomies seem tender, the self-interrogation nearly gentle. With the light of day the edges may turn hard and unjust, i know, but at the moment... Honest to (nearly) the core, i appreciate.
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| Re: (pieces, peaces) by Patsy |
basit_i 161.184.192.81 |
4-Jan-04/12:24 AM |
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Again, this is possibly simply the fact of the near-full moon, but...intimations of the Other Side? or, to quote, "dustbunnies where there are none"?
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| Re: More same than before by Patsy |
basit_i 161.184.192.81 |
4-Jan-04/12:26 AM |
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...they need point-fives when voting.
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Patsy 24.67.189.245 |
4-Jan-04/8:14 AM |
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i had not read this one for a while. Coming back to it, i like it even more, possibly because i have been listening to Bruce Co(ck)burn and find echos of him in here.
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| Re: Just-Average-Zongs-Zung by tralala42001 |
INTRANSIT 152.163.252.72 |
4-Jan-04/9:38 AM |
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Hmmm. Your moniker suggests something juvenile. Your topics don't. I would suggest combining this with the other (8 minutes). The good morning simply needs more material. Wear your safety belt. It can be a rough ride around these parts.
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| Re: He doesn't love me by tuthaliash |
INTRANSIT 64.12.96.46 |
4-Jan-04/10:36 AM |
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Really really good. Based on the fact that Tinty-G is your referrer, and this poem, I'd say you'll be moving on soon.
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| Re: Just-Average-Zongs-Zung by tralala42001 |
little_big_nose 216.207.134.80 |
4-Jan-04/5:44 PM |
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this poem was so confusing it's great
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| Re: one true love (beta test) by crwncka1 |
little_big_nose 216.207.134.80 |
4-Jan-04/5:48 PM |
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| Re: Internet Prisoner by avwiz71 |
little_big_nose 216.207.134.80 |
4-Jan-04/5:49 PM |
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dude, this should be a song, it's real great
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| Re: Searching... by kissmeufool58 |
little_big_nose 216.207.134.80 |
4-Jan-04/5:50 PM |
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it has a sweet nothing to it that makes it ring
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| Re: Fireplay by drjhoss |
little_big_nose 216.207.134.80 |
4-Jan-04/5:51 PM |
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I think I know how you feel, love's a bitch
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| Re: The Spark by some deleted user |
little_big_nose 216.207.134.80 |
4-Jan-04/5:56 PM |
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kinda confusing, so it's pretty good
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| Re: CAUTION: VAMPIRE ZONE... by TanHand |
little_big_nose 216.207.134.80 |
4-Jan-04/6:05 PM |
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Holy crap man, thats awesome, never let anyone tell you to change it in any way, cuz it's perfect the way it is
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
little_big_nose 216.207.134.80 |
4-Jan-04/6:06 PM |
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ok, i hate rap, which doesn't mean this is bad, just not my taste
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| Re: Anniversary Poem by Blindpoetry |
little_big_nose 216.207.134.80 |
4-Jan-04/6:07 PM |
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you should do something for her just cuz you love her so much don't you think?
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