Re: the gods of rook and man by richa	fair12 66.84.225.2	23-Dec-03/2:10 PM
I think this is beautiful - but, some of the line splits through me a little and I had to read them a few times - tighten it a bit and it will be perfect. I give you a 9 - 10 when it's revamped. Send this out - it's worthy....
Re: her treasure by amber1028	richa 81.178.224.24	23-Dec-03/8:20 AM
rather sweet, could do with a couple of original images to grab the reader.
regarding some deleted poem...	fair12 66.84.225.2	23-Dec-03/9:19 AM
Excellent sonnet. A whimsical sadness. I give it a 9
Re: the gods of rook and man by richa	horus8 24.126.116.54	23-Dec-03/2:37 PM
Did I ever tell you about the time that I ate a quarter pound of ass in return for an all year pass to loom world?
Re: Thoughts Controlled by a Slow Server by <Wankster>	horus8 24.126.116.54	23-Dec-03/2:52 PM
I wouldn't know, I'm a bottom.
Re: We Are Still Friends by Blindpoetry	Bachus 24.126.116.54	23-Dec-03/8:42 PM
This reminds of that time... When I was born... A magical nurses' mask said... And everyone fucking laughed at me.
Re: My friend over there (the Mirror) by reo316	dragonfly 65.234.234.30	23-Dec-03/11:49 PM
I really like how you worded your last two lines. Solid work.
Re: secert love by crwncka1	crwncka1 66.141.123.182	24-Dec-03/7:59 AM
objective / sujective points of view linked as one to see things truly as they are... sense of dual inner/outer nature is just a veil of illusion used to seperate our existance from the earth, a place of suffering, misery that we our conditioned to blame hopelessly on our planet rather then our very own creation of nature ... the mass truly fooled by central powers of government/authority around the world... that are viewed as 'important' and should be listened too, like our true nature is set to destroy everything of importance if no authority existed to control it... in truth is just a projection of what authority and power is slowly manifesting... destruction of earth-----laugh my ass off
Re: secert love by crwncka1	Plaidypus 67.122.109.91	24-Dec-03/9:19 AM
You spelled "Secret" wrong.
regarding some deleted poem...	electroman1979 205.188.208.105	24-Dec-03/9:00 PM
-9
Re: Large Man on peach sandel by horus8	SupremeDreamer 204.31.163.202	24-Dec-03/10:14 PM
"and shall be not be not be not be not be at rest," ? I'm a wierdo- despite that this poem confuses me. (or was that your intention?) Blessed with seven.
Re: It's lonely at the top by Jeremi B. Handrinos	SupremeDreamer 204.31.163.202	24-Dec-03/10:20 PM
I've always known god to be the biggest clown ever. Blessed with nine.
regarding some deleted poem...	SupremeDreamer 204.31.163.202	24-Dec-03/10:33 PM
Your not annoying joe.. your boring at best- annoying people are direct and offensive, arrogant and at times stubborn. They also speak with sizzling attitude- this piece is like listening to a rigidly formal twit who reveals only a slight amount of pompousness that seems amazingly humble. Joe, when you pick a topic/character basis for a poem, try to become the character in the poem.. which definately requires you to exclude any of your own assumptions or mental attributes.
Re: It's lonely at the top by Jeremi B. Handrinos	dragonfly 67.192.110.241	24-Dec-03/11:04 PM
ha! what a dork. Not God, you. -8-
Re: Lenola prays with a stiletto by SupremeDreamer	horus8 24.126.116.54	25-Dec-03/10:33 AM
"Jesus's magic" lol.
regarding some deleted poem...	Plaidypus 67.116.60.56	25-Dec-03/10:43 AM
I'm sorry, what did men sucking their own dicks have to do with the rest of the poem? Were you, you know, doing that....?
Re: Fire by Pervy Elf	Blindpoetry 68.106.171.15	25-Dec-03/9:59 PM
Romantic, no? hm.. though, I can't help but think this was inspired by sex...?
Re: Lenola prays with a stiletto by SupremeDreamer	Joe-joe 68.194.47.34	26-Dec-03/11:53 AM
Although there are some akward/forced moments in the second half of this piece(e.g. "the blade replaced god")your vivid imagination remains well in tact here. The 1st 3 verses are extremely well worded....I thought you were on your way to a 10 as I was reading but the poem kind of fizzled out a bit in the last 3 verses. Again, I continue to be facinated by the obsession so many on this site have with Jesus and Catholicism. It seems that those who do not "believe" have more to say about Jesus than those who do. Very interesting phenomenon...don't you agree. I hope all is well with you Dreamer..it's been some time since we've spoken. Peace......Joe
Re: Fire by Pervy Elf	horus8 24.126.116.54	26-Dec-03/2:17 PM
I once knew this girl that wanted me to stick my foot in her vagina,and I did, but I could never look at her without laughing again, so that kind of sucked.
regarding some deleted poem...	ShaNoN+960317485 199.40.206.3	27-Dec-03/3:26 AM
another in the Shuushin style, great to read n better to hold dear to keep