| Re: Use Me by dragonfly |
Caducus 195.92.168.166 |
12-Dec-03/2:01 PM |
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Loved the opening but s2 ruined the feeling - damn ! You have potential and i'd love to see a more concise version. If you open as strongly as this you must close as strong (or more) 7
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Caducus 195.92.168.166 |
12-Dec-03/2:02 PM |
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2 - unfair man !
This is a glammed up thought process but the end intrigues me. 6
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| Re: A Cup Of Tea & Company by Caducus |
Caducus 195.92.168.166 |
12-Dec-03/2:05 PM |
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Wow i was number 2 for 49 mins. I must find that romanian vintage.
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| Re: Death & the Twisted Tree by SupremeDreamer |
Caducus 195.92.168.166 |
12-Dec-03/2:06 PM |
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Wild - I love it
Good show.
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| Re: The Glint by peaceseeker |
Caducus 195.92.168.166 |
12-Dec-03/2:10 PM |
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Though I dislike your attitude I must say a 4 is unfair.
I actually think this shows a side to of you I like and the word play is good. TAstes like diamonds I don't get?
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| Re: She is A Lover Deep Within by Joe-joe |
Caducus 195.92.168.166 |
12-Dec-03/2:12 PM |
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For your young years you are a fine writer.
I am mr pig too joe joe.
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ARTIE 66.68.146.139 |
12-Dec-03/3:21 PM |
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I like it, but, why is Jesu your only salvation, or abysmal help?
Some consider Lucifer to be the Guiding Light. Once embraced - one sees the Light, the Path from the abyss.
Interesting context indeed.
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| Re: The man of steel by <{Baba^Yaga}> |
ARTIE 66.68.146.139 |
12-Dec-03/3:28 PM |
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Mmmmm.... "Mutton Biceps". You're chasing that with whine I hope.
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| Re: Christ For Sale by Caducus |
horus8 24.126.116.54 |
12-Dec-03/3:55 PM |
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Lot of ideas and solid facts here.
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horus8 24.126.116.54 |
12-Dec-03/6:59 PM |
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"The seperation is gaining speed at this point in time, so I pick to lose my path for it was ever mine."
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| Re: Lessons on being a man by thepinkbunnyofdoom |
SupremeDreamer 66.42.2.29 |
12-Dec-03/9:05 PM |
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Not bad at all my furry friend. Long time no see.
Blessed with eight.
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| Re: Dolphins Of Dorset by Caducus |
Shuushin 207.5.211.177 |
12-Dec-03/9:40 PM |
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btw - I like this. Has an unforced flow to it.
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| Re: Christ For Sale by Caducus |
Shuushin 207.5.211.177 |
12-Dec-03/9:44 PM |
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Nicely constructed, if a tad long.
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| Re: Without you by Luv2write |
dragonfly 65.234.234.150 |
12-Dec-03/10:06 PM |
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I don't think you mention "the light" enough times.
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| Re: diamond of love by crwncka1 |
dragonfly 65.234.234.150 |
12-Dec-03/10:07 PM |
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| Re: What I really needed by Shardik |
dragonfly 65.234.234.150 |
12-Dec-03/10:10 PM |
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dragonfly 65.234.234.150 |
12-Dec-03/10:13 PM |
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I prefer the smell of Lever 2000.
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| Re: Night and day. by darby pyn |
The_Third_Isis 68.5.128.151 |
12-Dec-03/11:54 PM |
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Lets have one toghether* Cheers good worck.
I dont like to think about it either but...the lobster was good, so was the stephen king..I'll drink to that!
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| Re: Night and day. by darby pyn |
kingit 67.69.63.162 |
13-Dec-03/12:02 AM |
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I like better, the one about those 2 Canadian boys(poemwankers), at Deadman's Point.
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| Re: Head. by darby pyn |
The_Third_Isis 68.5.128.151 |
13-Dec-03/12:03 AM |
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Awwww girrrrll you had to go there didn't sha?That''seedy'' sermon should never touch your lips unless it was angelic revelation in c minor heh..heh..you is a lil devil.That should always have a reservation, at the very least an open one!
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