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some deleted user 24.222.81.233 |
29-Nov-03/4:37 PM |
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<{Baba^Yaga}> 24.126.116.54 |
29-Nov-03/6:05 PM |
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It never hurts to smile, try it.
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| Re: An Ode to Gobbling by horus8 |
Shuushin 207.5.211.177 |
29-Nov-03/2:23 PM |
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heh - funny - but "mouthful of pee"? blech.
deft weaving of rythm and rhyme; have a nine.
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| Re: A Plea To The Mother(Mother Earth) by Rainbow_chaser |
ShaNoN+960317485 199.40.206.3 |
28-Nov-03/8:16 PM |
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If mother is the the Earth - Who is the Father?? Dont tell me they are the same:o)
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| Re: People of Discord by ShaNoN+960317485 |
ShaNoN+960317485 199.40.206.3 |
28-Nov-03/8:32 PM |
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We dont need an Antichrist to bring any apocalyptic end â we have our own Leaders to do the Job better then him
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horus8 24.126.116.54 |
28-Nov-03/10:25 PM |
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Patsy 24.67.189.245 |
28-Nov-03/10:39 PM |
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Fascinating. Am intrigued. Hesitate to call favourite, since i seem to acquire a new one all the time, but would like to know more of this: recent? And what are the spiders?
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| Re: An Ode to Gobbling by horus8 |
DreamerSupreme 204.31.165.223 |
28-Nov-03/10:48 PM |
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Well, reminds me of my mother.. drunk and attempting to knife my father.
Blessed with eight.
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| Re: An Ode to Gobbling by horus8 |
ShaNoN+960317485 199.40.206.3 |
29-Nov-03/4:53 AM |
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good insanity in a big bang:o)
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ShaNoN+960317485 199.40.206.3 |
29-Nov-03/7:04 AM |
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been reading up on u, have 2 say u know more than u let us read. Like you style - just wondering if ever wud decide to fiddle a different tune ( not that am complaining) but just asking ennu:o)
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ShaNoN+960317485 199.40.206.3 |
29-Nov-03/7:06 AM |
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Shuushin 207.5.211.177 |
29-Nov-03/7:45 AM |
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The preceding dashes on each last line are used to indicate italics.
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horus8 24.126.116.54 |
29-Nov-03/1:56 PM |
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| Re: Poem for my neon guitar consorts by DreamerSupreme |
horus8 24.126.116.54 |
29-Nov-03/2:02 PM |
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""He gripped her thigh, and death smiled."
"The bus will give you a hard-on with books in your lap"
"I'm sick of these stinky boots, I'll never wake up in a good mood again".
Jim Morisson.
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| Re: A Good Stretch by kingit |
Shuushin 207.5.211.177 |
29-Nov-03/2:16 PM |
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I like it lots - but I struggle for meaning - a sexual encounter?
This thing you do with the line spaces and break... works. A pleasant, inviting cadence.
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Shuushin 207.5.211.177 |
29-Nov-03/2:19 PM |
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I have the same sentiment as IT, but I've written this kind of thing too; tried to capture that - that thing there.
it rings true, but its a familar, nearly 'given' sound.
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| Re: A "sirius"makeover by The_Third_Isis |
Freethinker1602 68.48.30.210 |
29-Nov-03/9:16 PM |
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kudos... seemed to have some sort of meter, almost. good composition and nice work on the structure ... I liked the lip biting kiss comment
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| Re: A Good Stretch by kingit |
kingit 67.68.48.241 |
29-Nov-03/9:19 PM |
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only one other has said so-...began unintentionally, I thought IT deterred, but...ffffffffffff. YES- sex, you are a smart feller. I enjoy the bulk of your werk.
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Crakyamuni 67.2.44.60 |
29-Nov-03/9:32 PM |
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good job. keep it up champ.
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smlink84 68.98.150.99 |
30-Nov-03/1:33 PM |
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Vanity at it's peak and yet far from the truth that you need.
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