| Re: Mr Zero? Your a coward. by DreamerSupreme |
SupremeDreamer 204.31.172.89 |
27-Nov-03/10:23 PM |
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Well shucks.. this write up got almost straight tens!?
you guys, I can never be angry long- ya'll soon brighten up my day always.
One of these days one of me pieces will get 6 average.. i feel it coming closer.. so elusive damnit. hope it isn't on this one though lol- that would be too ironic.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
Shuushin 207.5.211.177 |
27-Nov-03/10:25 PM |
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may you never be accused of being unpoetic again:
"Your breath upon my throat,
It reveals your ardent will.
Over me, this deep desire,
Will constantly spill."
horrey shirt, thats good stuff, Swift.
You must definitely keep that, the last though... brings it down a notch - maybe burn it?
nice!
as payment for the glow of that one stanza:
-9-
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Shuushin 207.5.211.177 |
27-Nov-03/10:29 PM |
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other buch metter
probably pulled from your bum;
dis one much too dumb.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
SupremeDreamer 204.31.172.89 |
27-Nov-03/10:35 PM |
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if you threw out "A stick is" then added "crumpets are"- you'd would have had me sold.. but then again, one must find his own special spice to give his haiku its punch.
This one fizzed and poofed, but you'll get better as you write some more.
Blessed with four.
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| Re: As You Are by MacFrantic |
SupremeDreamer 204.31.168.175 |
27-Nov-03/10:59 PM |
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really???? ah. I got an answer!
Heres a 2.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
richa 81.178.226.215 |
28-Nov-03/12:36 AM |
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Seems to be playing up the importance of technical terms. I think its broke - doesn't even know. Arrogance of someone thinking they can work something they know nothing about. Just a diy disaster.
To a certain extent provokes thought, but the subject I just can't get excited about.
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| Re: Poets who are virgins? listen to Mr. Haiku. by Don-Quixote |
Don-Quixote 204.31.168.175 |
28-Nov-03/12:48 AM |
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Hrmm.. well, I will have to restrain myself from tweaking it another 300 times.
Mr. Haiku doesn't allow much room for blabbering- but he did allow two extra haiku's this time, since we are dealing with virgins... and they do need to get laid.
Oh, and this is dedicated to McFan.
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Don-Quixote 204.31.168.175 |
28-Nov-03/12:55 AM |
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Well- its a good description of your average joe.
Liked it alot, and if im not mistaken? A concrete in disguise? atleast to me anyway.
Blessed with nine.
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| Re: Spuna Vs. Turkeef by <{Baba^Yaga}> |
SupremeDreamer 204.31.166.161 |
28-Nov-03/3:46 AM |
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Who smokes meth again? Just making sure you know.
Whats strange? it makes sense to me, somehow.. love it-utterly enamored by its twisted alienism. Actually? I'm fucking jealouse. But anyone who's anyone knows that.
Ten on turkeef. Spuna smells- and my nigger cat liked it.
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| Re: Poets who are virgins? listen to Mr. Haiku. by Don-Quixote |
richa 81.178.230.237 |
28-Nov-03/5:00 AM |
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First ones the best, and a nature theme, I mean what could be more natural?
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| Re: Sporadic Schizophrenia? Definately. by Y2kSlamPoet |
Everyone 163.1.146.87 |
28-Nov-03/5:02 AM |
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| Re: It tells the time (a tribute to Roddy) by richa |
ShaNoN+960317485 199.40.206.3 |
28-Nov-03/8:45 AM |
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toad has a wrist boyo. That he does, but no watch:o)
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| Re: Welcome to my life by ShelliAnne |
Aliangel114 162.84.163.188 |
28-Nov-03/11:34 AM |
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The lyrics themselves are good, but the la la las, and the na na nas, arnt very necassary. Otherwise good job - 10
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| Re: "I post here cause I have a lot of readers" by Bachus |
ShelliAnne 152.163.252.168 |
28-Nov-03/11:37 AM |
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| Re: RipTide by Aliangel114 |
ShelliAnne 152.163.252.168 |
28-Nov-03/12:01 PM |
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i have those feeling too ... i can communcate w/ that
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| Re: Im gonna draw a picture w/ a twist by ShelliAnne |
horus8 24.126.116.54 |
28-Nov-03/1:32 PM |
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lol. Indeed, as will your relationship with the house cleaner.
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| Re: As You Are by MacFrantic |
horus8 24.126.116.54 |
28-Nov-03/1:37 PM |
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
horus8 24.126.116.54 |
28-Nov-03/1:39 PM |
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"As I weight this risk I will take." weigh?.
Otherwise, decent. Happy gobbling.
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| Re: It tells the time (a tribute to Roddy) by richa |
Bachus 24.126.116.54 |
28-Nov-03/3:27 PM |
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At least the wristless might still sing.
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| Re: Catspotting with Hitler & a nigger cat by SupremeDreamer |
horus8 24.126.116.54 |
28-Nov-03/6:08 PM |
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I like that movie. I like Ghazals. I licks that shit, and then swats it off the table and shit.
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