Loved the way you wrapped up S1 with the last 4 lines, speaks volumes about family values, appreciation of nature over social disdain. Just one of those poems i want to read as i get something from it. The last one of your poems was partly responsible for my poem 'Brighton Beach' i would appreciate your views on it good or bad.....Please.

Wow shorter than a haiku and speaking as loud with less - impressed - maybe we could have a new category called >>>>>>>>> Shorts 8

Please explain the last 2 lines.

Are you feeling okay? I only found the use of anus once

Quite humorous. 10.

Nice job.

Nice.

Beautifully done...I wish I had a tribute to me...

Very funny! 10.

Funny stuff!

I have had plenty of parodies, but no tributes! Lucky fairy!

Well done...but why is there a syringe?

Very realistic walrus.

Very clever...10.

Quite a nice natural flow. And a nice use of the language, many nice images.

Quite lovely. I will say the first line made me immediately think of langston hughes - just that, and nothing else. excellent.

Such flowing words - though I don't completely understand it. The touch of rhyme in the middle is used to good effect.

"I spin rinse and tumble deeper into your realm." nice. something missing in the last line, I think.

a prosish (tm) seven, were it an actual sonnet, I would give you and 8.

cute. Meaningless outside of this place, the place of the purple pill. skillfully rhymed (well, hell, you made up half the words).