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on some deleted poem
13 Oct 2003, 5:40 PM
I may not understand this one, but it certainly does something well.
Sort of 'Why is the Sky Blue?' If you are doing this as a slam on mindless morons, it works.
I really like this. I can't why, not because I do not want to, but because I don't know.
I especially like the 3rd + 4th Stanzas. Well done.
Mourn, but we know you can't spell. Pretty good writer though.10
Boring
This is not poetry. It's only talk.
meandering. clever, but only at first.
in the last stanza change 'saw' to 'felt'. Also snowballs can only be made my people, not trees. Find some other way to say it.
pretty good, write some more 10
nice. did terrorists blow up the moon.. one day theyll do that too.
9.
Hopefully your dad will correct your spelling. In your dreams that is. ;) - it's "c'est la vie" (to be pedagogical)
that's what's been happening to me...denial works better with paranoia
Talent, talent. With these simple words, I praise you.8
Wow! If i am impressed i am to the fullest!
Something fierce. And the single rhyme in this - fate/wait - well played, that bit.
(I must confess to be ignorant of the background - saudi arabia? egypt?)
Great humor! I like your imponderables. Ya dun gud.
(This ain't a suck up [blow down]. Has nothing to do with you marvelous work here) <Saw you message on my site. Thanks for the visit.>
This has got a lot. Angst, despair and hope said well.
You make me laugh! To me this is a very good thing. Your view is refreshing.