why-o-why?- because, damnit!

Romantic & elegant- trees, flowers, wind, autumn. Not my thing, but solid.

hmmpphh!!!!

Good content, give us a few more!

Difficult to translate. Almost as difficult as the situation itself. But I understand where you're coming from.

you crack me up, that was good!

Wedged beneath my feathered bed A sordid stain begins to spread I think it's just an aging trout But is it time to sort it out? I tell myself I'll do it later But then the task gets that much greater And as it does my fetid room Takes on a browner fungal bloom I've naught to wear that isn't soiled And that thing there is brown and coiled But "accidents" are bound to reign When Toilet's blocked and has no chain So have a soul, and do take heart, And please ignore that well-timed fart, And tolerate those crude eyesores: It's just that I neglect my chores!!!!111

The ending is fairly awesome. I don't like that [the droplets] soaked into the floor; either I think of a cement floor in a factory, or via the title, a glass floor.

is kinda neat that life takes on this individual personality - I could do without the last two lines though (they don't really add anything nor are they beautiful enough to be ornamentation).

Pretty cool. I likey alot. Suggestion: using "dying" as a modify on a man who is having his entrails tugged out (I figure he is gonna die) . . . How about something else about the man? how about "naked"; that's pretty scary. Come to think of it, I don't find "tugs" "surprisingly violent" - wrench maybe?

This is, also, very good ImO. I have no nits for this. Nice!

Poor critter. I almost get the pity you feel here. I certainly see the lack of acceptance of personal responsibility. Basically boring angst.

bunny wabbit, ltns. ace poem btw. 9.

eenteresting... very eenteresting....

Droll. Very droll. Sorry, meant drool.

The cadence to this piece bears the mark of a skilled hand - very nice. I will be extremely nitty and suggest the spelling "nihilistic" instead of what is there. Not only will you make dictionary dot com happy, but given that a web search for "nihilistic" gets you 35,006 hits versus 30 for the other; it will give less folks pause.

Unkind to whom? You or the consumed? The two lines in the middle are an interesting mechanism of transition.

my poor aching [split] brain. I keep trying to see patterns. ooo - you could d o u b l e s p a c e them too!(seriously). Maybe with chicken brule, btw.

A pleasant waking. Last line excellent pun.

Such a simple poem for such a complicated thing. I'm not sure I like that.