One should kill randomly without personal ties to the victim. Otherwise, it's just another lame boring crime of jealous genitalia.

Right now? We're wishing you had a friend too. It would spare us the trouble of foraging through your rubbish for a reason. A reason to why and how you've made it this far without losing a limb or accidentilly blaming the world for your stupidity. unless you have, then naturally, I apologize.

I once wrote a better poem than this by tossing a sack full of letters out into the market place and asking a passing monkey to transcribe them using his typewriter.

This is the best poem about a pipecleaner I have ever seen. I especially like the way you use "inner thighs" to represent the main chute of the pipe, and the burning coffee for the tobacco.

I like this poem. It also almost reminds me of that one cartoon "Courage the Cowardly Dog". I mean that in a good way! I give you a 10!

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i think that coming right out with cognizance of your disorder ruins the surprise, lee. it's quite entertaining, the 'or so they say' refrain. but the opening needs work. imo.

rockmage--nice images here. my one critque would be the rat-a-tat-tat rhymtmic structure. weave it. put the chisels, rasps, and saws away ,and get yourself a loom. you've got some fine wool to warp, here.

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line breaks--why? no werkie, comme ca.

I love pumpkin bowling umm why is there a penis?

I feel that there is something missing too. It does need to describe the 'beautiful scars'. But other than that it was very good.

This poem is EXCELLENT. I cried when I read it. Everything just flows together. I give it a 10!

Tears...perfect 10!

[_] AABB rhyming scheme [_] About drugs [X] About romantic love [_] About writing [X] About suicide or self-mutilation [_] About the author's social pastimes [_] Arbitrary indentation [X] Arbitrary line breaks [_] Autobiographical but written in the third person [_] Clerical errors [X] Clichéd imagery (gazing out of window, tears falling like rain) [X] Clichéd rhymes (love/above, heart/apart) [_] Clichéd angst words (putrid, wretched) [_] Devoid of rhyme [X] Devoid of other linguistic embellishments (alliteration, onomatopoeia) [_] Devoid of other literary devices (simile, synaesthesia) [X] Devoid of wondrous or fantastical imagery [_] Ellipses used overabundantly [_] Insipidly whimsical or zany [_] Internet shorthand or emoticons [_] Leaving rant [_] Lower case only [_] 'Lyrics' [X] Melodramatic [_] Naively religious or superstitious [_] Obsessed with femininity [_] Pointedly unanswered questions [_] Rage against the machine [X] Repetition of a word or phrase to the point of nausea [_] Sanctimonious [_] Self-obsessed [X] Sentimental [X] Smugly-named protagonist [_] Thesaurophilia [_] Untitled [X] Vicarious wish fulfilment -12-

heh - cute. I was just about to give up, cuz the endrhymes are, well - like they are. Then you have this awesome ending; good job.

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please no more blue 0s if you do not like my work then be brave enough to say so. that is all i ask. have a good day ^_^

Still not back but I had a strong urge to write something to be thought about.

mead and head--no.