i like this a lot, rockmage. very vivid, very fresh image construction. (e.g., "And still a practicing Nomad,", "And could only see your mother’s red glow./Here is where you could see separately.”" and it has a nice sense of humor, too. swank. keep on rankin'.

DISCLAIMER: I personally believe this to be an absolutely dreadful poeme. I only posted it here as it was the easiest way to get an acquaintance of mine to read it. At her special request, I'm going to keep it up, despite its evident mediocrity. It's nothing but a silly, pretentious rant about how I haven't been able to write any music in weeks. I meant it to serve as therapy, and it didn't even do that.

Kinda like something in this. why was green the color you picked though? Just wondering

This is the best rendition or the bloody practice I have ever read. I have to keep pulling my fingers away from the keyboard as the images blast though my hands. Ouch. Delightful irony.

You make me feel so lucky to have a long lasting relationship, ever how bumby the ride may be at times.

This jerked a tear and then a laugh.

No habla espanyol. No speaka da spanish. Or is this Itialian? Or Porugeese. I have to venture a gues that this is good. The other two I looked at certainly were. Sadly I must give it an 8. And this is only because I do not do translation.

I get the flavor of prostitution here. A little button in my brain going on and off. Not attempting to insult. Rather the reverse. I still see a pay for play.

I like things that make me laugh morbidly. Black humor is a good release. I once saw a sidewalk with a brain splattered on it. Let em try to fix that!

Yes, them lusty old goats seem to be able to kill all pleasure. Very irreverent.

Interesting.

and now to rate it. I think it is a piece worthy of praise there for I give you a 9 to bad there can't bea 6, right ;) kidding of course

hey I'm on AIM at Impishkat

Ha ha ha, Okey dokey, that was some silly shit there. Like the time my left foot exploded and seriously wounded a clown red nose.

Could use another edit, but who couldn't? I'm just saying that because your work is worth it, and always either perfect or damn near. 9.

thank god.

Oh yeah, dig it. 10.

no need for accolades from me. an Alka-seltzer, perhaps?

Shift s-3 to s-1. or use it as kindling. sock me in the gut, would you?

Erm, if you can't say something nice, don't say anything at all. I'm keeping schtum.