You'll have to forgive my younger brother. He's extraordinarilly bright, but hopelessly unsophisticated. I hope this ten will please you. I really am quite fond of hawks.

Well, it would have been much more interesting if you would have rhymed Pee chee with spermicid(e).

Christ almighty. Different from your usual, as was your last before this, but amazing nonetheless. they made me feel.

This poem is just a shameless cash-in on the popularity of AIDS. -0-

Do you examine your stools in the bowl? I was once having a conversation about it, and three of my friends all said they did this, and they thought I was really weird for not doing. Who is right? N.B. -10-

A fine example to any aspiring young poets. -10-

This would only be good if it was actually written by an actual gnome. -1-

their should be they're. good use of rhythm.

You must be completely bonkers.

you are asking the reader to believe you have no idea 'lightbulb in my head, it seems to be dead' and then expecting someone to value your poem. A small point of logic I like the rhyme gnome and poem, if you really are short as a gnome it is even better.

good, like the sinister turn at the end. Is the second line not 6 syllables though?

check the inconsistent verb tenses - devours - receding active to passive - I'm not exactly sure. but i know that recedes works better, and leaves you room for an adjective or other words in the last line.

I like the simplicity.

A bit like a pimple poem, schoolboy insecurities. I gather it is about being in the army, makes you sound a little wimpy. The verses are redundant as this is a piece of prose. I could identify with certain of your points though -7-

the last one, I seem to forget what you were supposed to rhyme the last line with. Other than that good rhythm, and in the spirit of a limerick

great clarity, you are obviously a man who has no trouble grappling with your immense intellect.

Kite-flyers running the rim of a hillside Love it !

How might I ask did this piece of shit get a ten?

it's simple...look at the crap in the top 15...especially the #1

i actually liked this...im gonna check out the rest of ur stuff..