What if Jesus was looking on this website and found out you'd said "bullshit". You'd be sent to hell for sure.

It's vivid, I'll give you that.

Okay, very funny. Really, what makes this better than Flail & Fuck?

Credo che dovrte rimuovere la traduzione. Coloro che non capisce che l'italiano sarà costretto per soffrire la nebbia di babelfish e coloro che capisce l'italiano riterranno lo scopo progettato. Forse è migliore senza la traduzione (ma molto elegante)

Author's Note: Probably one of the supidest poemes ever secreted by human glands. Love it or loathe it, one thing's for fucking certain: this is one poeme that's going places big time! I do hope you enjoy it. If you don't then you're probably a fucking spastic or something. Cheers!

Changing comes to stays makes all the difference. Brava, signore! (Forget babelfish, I'm learning Italiano)

It's fucking painful to witness such naked expression but, worse yet, I'm sure, to be a hundred dollar vocabulary trapped in a 14 year old body. I gotta give you a ten for sheer risk but, first tell me; Was it love at first read?

I get a zero from a logged on viewer and not even an insulting comment? That is truly insulting! Come on folks, with your help this could make it onto the top20 Worst Poems list! ...or you could tell me just where I've gone wrong so I can learn to not suck.

Splendid.

Well, that's me converted.

What?? Who put that 5 there? I'll never make the Worst List with that kind of interference. A mediocre vote is even more insulting than a zero.

God be praised! Jesu has posted on PoemeRanker! 10! 10! 10! 10!!!!!!!!!!111111111111

It's too bad this is on the Worst List but, if it wasn't I probably never would have had the pleasure to stumble across it.

I read an article recently about the use of Bach as accompaniment to violent imagery in films. Did you see that too? I like the burning sculpure idea and would like more details of that. Might I suggest a guilotine for the hands. I have to reserve my vote until you tell me what that last line means (and what language it is). I only speak English and only just barely.

Jesus is omniscient, and therefore would have to know the answer to the question "Jesus? what is wrong?". The logical inconsistency makes it hard to believe this is actually Jesus. Is it supposed to be a Jesus impersonator or imposter of some sort?

Now I see why my precious "Flail & Fuck" will never make the Worst List, it lacks that offensive brand of pretension that pretends not to be pretentious.

River of beer? Rain paint? Other than those two lines it was a cool poem. But is it an ode to flailing and fucking or ellipses?

This is decent. It could use a little tightening. Even though I want to read a more expressive description, this stark treatment is likely most appropriate.

Ah. An unfermented wine with a sweet finish. Now that's a twist. See "Bach and Hollywood's bad guys" by Scott Timberg Los Angeles Times (reprinted in the Vancouver Sun Tuesday, August 26, 2003. I knew I had that article hangin' around. I hope it serves you.

I'm guessing there's a story behind this poem. Care to share it?