I'm much better than everything.

OK.

fun excursion into the realms of shakespearian sonnet. Rather good

beau, dans cela a maladroitement traduit la manière.

I'm scared of this. Is Jesus after me?

What did you mean by "thick and thin"?

incredible, good work, very emotional, write more

everything is a cliche, and unsubstantiated words tossed around like evil and insanity. The rhythm is good, but I'm not sure the frivolous treatment of schizophrenia is entirely appropriate. Unless the voices in your head are god? then you are divine (szasz), but it needs to be a bit more explicit about that.

I particularly liked the "of" in the second line.

Yeah, that is pretty useless. But I've never seen the idea before, so if you made it shorter, funnier, and gave it a clever title, it might be worth something.

That is a pretty damn tiny poem; I had to bust out the magnifying glass and everything. Now is it "Stick the conditioner bottle in my ass" or "Lick the vein protruding from my penis"? 9/10.

Welcher Fremdsprache? Nicht italienisch oder spanisch?

Who gave me the 0, what's that about? Speak if you dislike this so much. It takes a pretty crappy poem to deserve a goose egg and if you think so then vocalize your dislike or quit with the petty shit.

I dunno, Richa. Despite the semi, the seagulls have now apparently grown as tall as the gravestone of the grandfather. Might want to rethink that bit.

Didn't care much for this at all - surprise surprise I think the dove was the Holy Spirit telling you that you have blinded yourself to His truth like Saul on the road to Damascus you were blinded so that you might see things more clearly.

Hey nice poem! Keep posting more!!!

How do you write like that! I really like how you almost trick the reader to think you are talking about something else and then leave them with a tear in their eye. . .well at least me

I like how it flows. . .but suggest that maybe the last line should be directed elsewhere.

pain is a gift?

Good content, not to mention a good reminder for me!