some deleted user
on some deleted poem
6 Sep 2003, 7:38 PM
Nice job, as usuall, Joe-joe.
god'swife is a fat tart who writes mediocre poetry.
Yes, a statement.
some deleted user
on some deleted poem
6 Sep 2003, 10:52 PM
Fuck off. I mean fudge off.
some deleted user
on some deleted poem
6 Sep 2003, 10:51 PM
I was thinking about that lady.
some deleted user
on some deleted poem
6 Sep 2003, 10:51 PM
There are so many mistakes.
some deleted user
on some deleted poem
6 Sep 2003, 10:50 PM
what were you thinking?
shadowaura
on Babelfish Poetry (II): Rendu plus Doux (Français) by Geschäftsreise
6 Sep 2003, 7:49 PM
jonas
vermicular in a very good way
10.
Well done joe I really enjoyed this one.
honed.
its good,keep up the good work
I am sure much of this is true, but it needs framing better. A different perspective, something to interest the cynic
not uninteresting swing ingfrom 'she will not listen' (she doesn't want you), to 'to try and forgive her' (as though she seeks your approval'
Not much to go on though
Very nice, but changing from "she/her" to "you" was a little confusing. 9
Hmm. Ancestor or infant or someone else? I think the idea of Whitney Houston's "I will always love you" takes away from the piece.
Just what did you do?
Von der einfachen Unzufriedenheit zum völligen infidelity. Glauben Sie an karma? Ich auch nicht.
some deleted user
on some deleted poem
6 Sep 2003, 7:39 PM
I love the freeform. Nice.
title ideas anyone, or other constructive feedback?