Shardik
on some deleted poem
4 Aug 2003, 7:34 PM
I believe Pinochio did, and her name was the Blue Fairy.
have you checked e-bay? they have all kinds of stuff.
"Wish I had only stopped and thank"
didn't get this line.
No pun intended but this is some good shit!
cmon.. this is like, what, a fourth grade poem? 4.
You're an obvious "Lap snorkel".
it's just one muscle that aches.
Nifty, but I think eating grapes would work better than fruit.
it takes a fresh view, joe. yes, you're right there with the humanity of the experience--but you're reporting it, and i want you to make me feel it. all night's the best of the lot. but, check out the helpful hints here:
http://www.uni.edu/~gotera/CraftOfPoetry
I believe your title should be "The Junky's Lament" (or, w/ alternate spelling, "The Junkie's Lament" unless there are multiple junkies here, in which case it should be "The Junkies' Lament"
Ha ha... So did my date. Her chest smelled of the Sea. Her trap of fish.
welcome to poem ranker, though it is a pimple poem, it still has beauty and melodic ring.
touching.
wow.
smelly, but not salty?
Nice ending. Hope you find the person.
some deleted user
on some deleted poem
5 Aug 2003, 12:37 AM
Nice rhythm...8
Thats a damn good poem bro
Did you get knocked the fuck out?