Lifeboatman
on Clay Man by eliastemplar
2 Aug 2003, 12:54 AM
Ang galing... 10
Amusing. blessed with 9.
Well done. 10.
i know what you mean... 9
yes. much clearer. but you forgot homeland security and the TIA. althou those are probably buzz words, and now we're both on a list...
nice... 10
fucking tight...best I've read
I like cigarettes
lay off the lesbian shit!!! 0
Well done.. made me shiver in disgust though.. dont mean that to be insultive. 10.
Ok, well, when you inserted that last line, it like, screwed the whole thing. Plus, again i have someone saying im a lesbian! oh well.. atleast people know i love women.. cept im a man, which makes lesbianism hard to pull off. Really, doing the feministic act would cause me to give myself OneFingerAnswer's 22 caliber lobotomy and render myself void and null in the universe.
I bless thee with an eight.
lmao. well man, you no longer need my chemical twist to inject the funny potion into your work.. you suceeded beautifully. 10.
bleh, bored me dead.. couldnt even finish the first two stanzas before i wanted to ram my skull into my monitor and electrify my soul.. 4
My birdie didnt go tweet tweet.. it went sheet sheet.. dont worry, i shut the fucker up with my letter opener in a poetic fit of rage and farted out a decent ode.
This you might consider stupid, but it made me laugh my ass off. 10.
I enjoyed it.. blessed with 8
The Onomatopoeia of our bodies....love that.
it seems I'm always laughing at 2 a.m......
insestors - webster doesn't recognize this word.. what is it sposed to mean? Same for uniquity.
other than that, this is a gigantic leap from your other works, im impressed. Blessed with 10
Nice job. I like the flow except this one part:
"Taken good care of
by politics called "love"
retarded defectives and
mutants can rise above"
Did you mean incestors or insistors- I could see how either might fit in.
cool...10