Fear of Garbage
on Clay Man by eliastemplar
1 Aug 2003, 7:24 PM
interesting....at least
I loved it.
sheeps...6
I really like shifting into minor chords... 10
It actually is half the sperm cell you used to be ~! Get it!?
I liked the last stanza...
Last time I propped a panda, she got pregnant, and the zoo was pissed.
Could've been better... write not with your brain
very nice. i'm trying to decide if i like the abrupt ending or not
last line is great but "drive through drive thrus" is weak
this poem is so stupid that I have to comment on it myself on its stupidity
I love this. You have a gift for descriptive writing. The poem is strong and consistent throughout. 10
Just now a bird fell dead out of the sky and landed on a toddler in Mexico, disabling them both, forever.
What a queer ending. I don't associate the sense of loss and rememberance with a person, but the hopeful dreams we've had and left behind, the familiar places in our minds.
Thanks,
Lcpl.Busby
Cross eyed children and magnets....must have gotten shot with a BB gun. Be careful if you go for an MRI!
Not if your pee pee is inside out, than it's like getting kicked in the cuntansnatch, which is a small village in Belgium, where that style of prick kick was first ritualised by homosapiens. I was on a dig when we made the discovery. Then, of course, i brought it back here to the ranker. For experimental purposes.
Have to see if I understand this: Some kid use to BEAT you, so you met him in a motel grabbed his SKIN and blew him for a drink, then you two fucked,in the name of science?
This trauma followed you since you were eight!
HELP IS AVAILABLE.
I guess baboons do habitat with hyenas. I agree someone dont get it, its not about Africa. Whats wrong with some people? It rates an 8, but the story would have been better suited amongst the Abos of Oz.
Howdy Doody for president!
hehe...
liked it... 10