5-7-6. Lovely none the less. Mart/yre/d.

You do a lot better with free verse--not that this isn't good, because it is, but there are so few people who have mastered the art of rhyme and meter. It's really difficult to compete with my personal fav - Shakespeare, who I use as a standard by which to judge others. 5

Well that's a happening piece.

good show

Nothing ground breaking here, but that's pleasant occasionally, normality in simple observations and respect for the natural world around you. 7

Now that's devotion. 10

This is very good. I feel a sense of a detachment from every scene, as is the the case with the first-person view of the writer: an observer of these people in a motel. Some of the imagery could be stronger at the beginning and the end, but the middle is vividly drawn attracting attention to each descriptive detail. 8

I expected this one too have comprimised is anal retentiveness, but sadly I was let down. Therefore I must dock you a point and merely give you a nine. I enjoyed these very much, may I use them for propaganda leaflets?

Ha Ha ha ha, a treasure, ha ha. What a hip toss. That was like Kerry Voneric and the iron claw, what a riot.

The end could be strengthened and overall I had fun with this piece. 7.

PRONUNCIATION GUIDE "Generouse" is a French word, pronounced "ZHJON-AIR-OOZ" and meaning "Fuck Bunny" Not to be confused with the English word, "generous".

It's a bit short, isn't it?

lol but how is the walrus gay? you should have him stradling a rainbow with his back flippers. or suckign off another walrus' tusks

oh, my! i had never seen this one! and, for the longest time, i did think you were settle. may i still call you settle? you know,for old times sake? <sniff>

flouroscope

Heeky

That's swit.

Painful read. Horrible poem

The first two lines are almost good, well with and edit or two. Toss the rest.

dammit i am jealous