regarding some deleted poem...	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	6-Feb-07/8:32 AM
Anybody who is anybody knows that you were sired by Mr and Mrs Beavers from Narnia ( http://www.pop-arena.com/articles/narnia/narnia-220.jpg) and consequently you were born with one of life's great advnataged the ability to build from junk.
Re: Stopped Cold by coldiron	Dovina 75.82.86.162	6-Feb-07/11:22 AM
You can, and may have, walked his paths: http://travel.sulekha.com/hampshire/sites.aspx He’s one of the few poets who never fool around, never stick in a silly piece out of boredom, and almost always say at least two worthwhile truths in every line. His writing is dark, or dour as you say, if you wish to see it darkly, or not see the light. I hope only to approach his weight and buoyancy, two forces acting oppositely, where a small nudge makes all the difference. Good reflection.
Re: City Beat by Quarton	Dovina 75.82.86.162	6-Feb-07/11:30 AM
"so" say your prayers. "sycophant"? A good beat and good rhymes, doesn't seem forced.
Re: Tea,One Night Stands and Smores by Bethy	Dovina 75.82.86.162	6-Feb-07/11:36 AM
A good moving story. Tense conflict - might be best to make it all present tense, but you could just eliminate the few out-of-past-tense verbs. Also, quote marks are inconsistent - I'd use them on all quotes. And spacing - yes, a space after every comma. I like it though.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dental Panic 84.27.81.27	7-Feb-07/12:59 AM
I tripped over the second 'but still' in the fourth stanza. Didn't mind. I liked the read.
regarding some deleted poem...	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	7-Feb-07/1:21 AM
I love the use of brackets to signify a winking aside to the rest of us! This is even better when one considers the juxtaposition of one exclamation mark with another!! emphasising the undoubted comic nature of this limerick. In summary, a triumph of good natured, pragmatic humour over the death of a pet which would have indubitably served as a cathartic meditation for the author.
regarding some deleted poem...	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	7-Feb-07/1:23 AM
Excellent.
Re: Flowers by Dovina	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	7-Feb-07/4:23 AM
I believe it is stretching poetic licence to suggest that flowers could toss a girl. A girl could toss with flowers, a girl could be tossed with flowers, but importantly a flower could not toss a girl. The next two lines read like something out of a wanna-be bridget jones romcom fiction book that's free with this months peoples friend. "But again never comes" is the most bow'ls thing I have ever, ever read.
regarding some deleted poem...	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	7-Feb-07/4:25 AM
This is the most terribly obvious nonsense I have read on this site.
Re: love cycle by j_beckfield	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	7-Feb-07/4:26 AM
I think this is terribly clever, and what's more it rhymes!!!!
Re: untitled #2 by venusdemilo	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	7-Feb-07/4:27 AM
A really good point, why do people fight over ethnicity. Is it because blacks no longer know their place or because we have become soft?
Re: Pedophile by Lenore	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	7-Feb-07/4:28 AM
brave and contradictory.
Re: One Size Fits Most by Lenore	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	7-Feb-07/4:28 AM
wow the spacing on this is really really big.
regarding some deleted poem...	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	7-Feb-07/4:33 AM
Dizzyingly contentious, whilst evoking the creaking motion of redundant bow'ls suddenly roused to life.
regarding some deleted poem...	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	7-Feb-07/4:34 AM
Is this a joke?
regarding some deleted poem...	xxx 67.172.190.253	7-Feb-07/7:13 AM
Aside from a least one spelling error, (you might try using spell-check. I use to my great advantage [It almost makes me appear educated.]; some people really get their butts out of whack when a letter is left off or placed in the wrong spot.) , this is really a fine piece. Thanks.
regarding some deleted poem...	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 63.212.164.89	7-Feb-07/8:55 PM
Excellent line breaks!!!!11 The last line is really great!!!!111
Re: Drowning by wilco	amanda_dcosta 61.17.21.37	8-Feb-07/2:59 AM
When do we get to hear this piece of yours. Would love to. I like the style in most of your lyrics.
regarding some deleted poem...	amanda_dcosta 61.17.21.37	8-Feb-07/3:04 AM
A good write.
Re: Flowers by Dovina	amanda_dcosta 61.17.21.37	8-Feb-07/3:10 AM
Am I the only one to understand what you mean with all these flowers... dried or ascii. I'm happy to see this post and it gives me a nostalgic feel although the flowers are yours. Too bad that the string of ascii characters didn't come an angel's way, at least not yet.