quite simple but clear with a few interesting lines I think to say minds are jailed in madness is not warranted. And if it is you have not argued it overall pleasant though

I quite like thone word style, but is this really the insight of an addict?

coming back to the bus driver again doesnt relly work. other than that I liked the bit about interuption of bus ride hush. And the first verse packs a lot of context in

really I think you need to think about what you feel seperate to anyone else and your communications will be more effective. things like heartache are just blanket terms, they mean nothing

a bit jargonised I think (soul mind eternity etc). And the flow is a bit off which is important for a lyric/ode. and you don't believe you are dead? I think descarte sorted that one out a while ago overall better than a lot

You stir danger with desire and in the oven we find a fire. I am eleven years old and have never felt this before. God, I'm begging your wife, "Please give me more!!" 10,I said!

I liked this better than "Always". The jagged feel is is right for how my impulses make me feel. In fact you get my 7 on the feeling alone.

I must have been put here on this site to counter-ballance your optimism. I wish I could believe in Him. None the less, I always get off on a confident self-assertion. Power must be derived from somewhere.

um... jesus christ, poemranker isnt the bitter lover ranting forum.. i mean if your crappy love life is going to inspire you to pick up a pencil, atleast TRY to be fucking artistic at it if you plan to call it a poem. Sorry, not trying to step on you, but this shit is complete garbage. blessed with a zero.

Combat fatigue. Nice that you have a place/method to release some of those painful memories, and that you seem to be able to see what happened clearly.

painful

Thanks for reminding me to wear flip flops in ALL showers from now on.

I like how human this feels. What do these poems in the "pimple" category have in common? Just wondering.

Pretty good read, managed to make a roach interesting to read about. blessed with 9.

Are these the new Eminem lyrics? It's good to write in the heat of the moment,but....

its nice..i like it...

its nice..i like it...by the way vote 4 my songs plz...there will be more added

i like it!

Over used rhyme, very little detail and imaginative writing... I've seen millions that look just like this. Don't get all pissed over my opinion, I'm just going on the quality of the poem. Blessed with a two.

Another internet rat-ling who thinks writing is kewl.