cleverdevice
on My last ever poemranker transmission by King Abdullah II
3 Jul 2003, 6:21 AM
hmmmm, well good riddance
i like the alternative take here.
nice poem
not entirely unpornographic though
lol
See you later cock-4-lunch.
Shoulda shot him, end his pain, stupid junkies. Waste on society.
nothing he feels/ addict to a needle? what about withdrawal
like the hyena analogy
"We're a bunch of talentless no-hopers. That's right. Every single one of us."
Speak for yourself. You had an awful mouth! Get kicked off?
Shardik, horus8, <{Baba^Yaga}> and Bachus
Ding dong the which is dead...
hahaha, true, so true about evolution.
let us for a moment
pretend we were poets
reads well
the title mirror mirror is a bit overused
good ending structure, perhaps the words a bit cliched
other than that good, I like your use of modern language
I knew horus8 and jeremy b were the same but bachus?
bachus was a shit to me the other day none of the others were
glad you didn't mention me i'm kind of sensitive
yours richard
ps i have these thoughts sometimes too
fast running
perhaps needs a little shortening
get rid of the prose/ predictable stuff
No, she didn't breast feed me, she did giving birth.
Don't worry 'bout a thing, sir.
It really is okay.
You really shouldn't apologise
For being so very gay.
Don't worry 'bout a thing, sir.
I really do not mind,
And I'll decline the inivitation
To spank your broad behind.
I'm sure your son will be delighted
p.s. what about my work?