horus8
on some deleted poem
1 Jul 2003, 10:49 AM
Yep
A cramped gerbal starving for oxygen and a nappy.
unless
a = 5
b = -5
algebra is so gay like that
sentiment done many times before about the childhood den etc
imagery good and placed in a very definite place
Ouch. You get 50 cool points for cuting off your own dick and still having the balls to slide down a waterslide. You Lose 50 cool points how ever for cutting your own dick off.
and when your daddy would touch you
great poem man
You tortured soul. I feel sorry for you. Really. I do. Sorry enough not to vote cause there aren't negative numbers on this scale. Break the Mold. Think out side the box a bit(or at least in the very far corners).
see philosophy of science is easy
i like this a lot
but "like a moss" kinda sounds awkward
i dunno why
maybe it's cuz i think of moss as alot
i dunno
but yea good poem
definitely an 'other'
interesting, like an individuals log from the point of the observer, extra points for that.
I think you could miss out the end bit explaining it, it is not really needed
the computer feel is a bit corner.
other than that it sets itself an ambition and answers it, well reasoned.
cooking for food is an interesting link, Plath used to do lots of baking before writing.
stigma an interesting word to use.
i think of stigmata which draws a link with the first verse somehow in its explicitness.
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Too Long and Sounds Vaguely familiar to something else I read not too long ago, Although the name escapes me.
i can what you're getting at
here's a pack of tampons
You're so pretty
not
Your so pretty
i like the last line fag
Damn. That has to be the most intellectual thing I have ever read. I love the way you don't waste words, and just say what you mean. Its so beautiful I got misty eyed. That has to be the best Thing I have ever read in my entire life. -10-
I am humbled by your skills. -10-
You're