regarding some deleted poem...	xxx 67.172.190.253	25-Jan-07/5:24 AM
Only you are captured.
regarding some deleted poem...	ecargo 167.219.88.140	25-Jan-07/7:19 AM
It's a bit melodramatic (lurid, to use your word). You've got a nice sense of language and rhythm, but it has a very old-fashioned feel to it. Think about what you're trying to say and then play with how to say it--this doesn't really, in the end, say much ("Words, words, mere words, no matter from the heart").
Re: The Passing by Stephen Robins	ecargo 167.219.88.140	25-Jan-07/7:24 AM
Ace. "Ethnic splatter" . . . just ace.
regarding some deleted poem...	Jill Stockinger 67.172.190.253	25-Jan-07/7:25 AM
Unfortunately true.
regarding some deleted poem...	Ranger 62.252.32.15	25-Jan-07/11:39 AM
Did you actually edit this, or are you just resubmitting it for better votes and comments? HINT: comment and thou shalt be commented upon.
Re: Controlled Euthanasia by Dovina	Dovina 208.127.72.149	25-Jan-07/1:47 PM
Dovina: Inspired by “One in Ten Thousand,” Athena Workman, GUD. Just click at your left.
regarding some deleted poem...	xxx 67.172.190.253	25-Jan-07/8:27 PM
Poor deluded critter!
Re: The Glass by dancin_n_da_moonlite	Ranger 62.252.32.15	26-Jan-07/4:59 AM
Keep playing around with this one, because it really has got some good ideas and potential.
Re: Controlled Euthanasia by Dovina	Ranger 62.252.32.15	26-Jan-07/5:03 AM
The last stanza's great and the rhythm's good. It feels like it's missing a bit though; I tend to work in threes - you've given two punishments here, maybe a third would add to the effect? I've never seen a syringe flop, or is that line just innuendo?
regarding some deleted poem...	Ranger 62.252.32.15	26-Jan-07/5:05 AM
Well the first eight lines are fine, after that the metre disintegrates, and if that falls apart in a poem then so does the message. Keep chipping away at this one.
regarding some deleted poem...	xxx 67.172.190.253	27-Jan-07/4:16 PM
Lower case signifying self rather good. I find this to be quite humorous (the whole of the work). Even if you are an old poster scamming, I enjoyed the read.
regarding some deleted poem...	xxx 67.172.190.253	27-Jan-07/8:04 PM
You are persistently bad.
regarding some deleted poem...	xxx 67.172.190.253	28-Jan-07/8:24 AM
Just as bad as all the rest of your stuff.
regarding some deleted poem...	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 75.192.213.24	28-Jan-07/10:46 AM
Is this you: http://tinyurl.com/22a9pw
Re: Stained by fadedlove	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 75.192.213.24	28-Jan-07/10:55 AM
This so effortlessly achieves the vague air of guffing claptrap that wheezes out of all good poetry. Sublimely beautiful. A triumph. You have talent: use it.
regarding some deleted poem...	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 75.192.64.249	28-Jan-07/11:56 AM
One of the largest self-contained guffs I have ever seen. Larger guffs have been formed, but they were all composed of smaller guffs that joined forces to form giant dunce-omelettes. You are a colossal boob.
Re: He's... by holliebollie_19	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 75.192.64.249	28-Jan-07/12:20 PM
There's a mysterious quality to this poeme... something I can't quite pinpoint... I find it haunting... real... it's very powerful... do you often try to evoke such emotions in your work?
regarding some deleted poem...	xxx 67.172.190.253	28-Jan-07/12:56 PM
The content is fine. I have a little trouble with the form, but I am learning how to get over that, as a reader does have some responsibility. What bothers me is how everything is put together as an idea or group of ideas. It is like watching a bag of marbles spilling out and trying to focus on one in the stream. It could be just my bad vision (metaphorically speaking) or lack of proper intelligence (reality speaking). It seems more of a street-corner rant. (Sorry about the double message, I spelled a word wrong )
regarding some deleted poem...	Dental Panic 84.27.81.27	28-Jan-07/1:31 PM
Change the 'you' into 'I' and you'll end up with a derivate of Seamus Heaney's Personal Helicon. 'Now, to pry into roots, to finger slime, To stare, big-eyed Narcissus, into some spring Is beneath all adult dignity. I rhyme To see myself, to set the darkness echoing.'
Re: Controlled Euthanasia by Dovina	richa 81.179.135.216	28-Jan-07/1:46 PM
I read the gud one. The only bit I liked was the end when she found him with peanut butter and struggling with a loaf of bread. I'm not sure the poem makes any sense though.