Re: Alternatives by Dovina	Dental Panic 84.27.81.27	28-Jan-07/1:53 PM
The de-baathification, forcing their armed forces to go underground, was an incredibly stupid move - you really think them with the math can heal that kind of stupidity? Use a guy like Rumsfeld as guinea pig, see what happens.
regarding some deleted poem...	richa 81.179.135.216	28-Jan-07/1:59 PM
This doesn't make much sense. The first verse sounds very poetic and all but what does it mean. The bit about words walking, flying, buried under pine trees again how is that true. None of it tracks.
regarding some deleted poem...	richa 81.179.135.216	28-Jan-07/2:09 PM
I don't know about the last line. Bathetic is I think the word for it.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 208.127.72.242	28-Jan-07/2:49 PM
Yes, the last line is bit of a letdown. Best, I think, to conclude this nicely descriptive piece with something like "brushed with finely toxic salt" You can probably think of something better.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dr Peter Douglas 80.225.110.92	28-Jan-07/3:24 PM
This is interesting perception of a unamed poets ego, self assured in the knowledge that his work is the best or so he thinks and how everyone admires his work. Thankfully this kind of poet is in the minority, while the rest of us are very to take on board other peoples comments when they are refering to the poem and suggestions to improve that work. Whilst the negative results usually are greeted with a rebuffal! I enjoyed this piece very much and enjoy poking fun at ego especially as a poet!
Re: Journey To The Centre Of The Loom by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	Dr Peter Douglas 80.225.110.92	28-Jan-07/3:33 PM
As someone who is new to this site it is good to see a poem that is in a different style from what appears to be the favoured Free style. Many years ago i visited a working loom, albeit a preserved one but a very interesting experience. The clouds of cotton dust that choked you as you walked around, the noise of the machine the complex simplicity of the machine and the flying wheels cogs and loom that ended in this beautiful creation of silk at the far end, all of which you have captured in this ode, which is a creative piece on a part of most countries history, but certainly from my own country england the social history involved with these machines created a new way of thinking and reaction that led to many social changes that are still relevant today. Very enjoyable piece that i will read again and again.
Re: Alternatives by Dovina	some deleted user 64.140.227.22	28-Jan-07/4:12 PM
In the eyes of the world we're already standing at precipice of defeat.
regarding some deleted poem...	horus8 76.170.36.27	29-Jan-07/12:10 AM
Practically funny.
regarding some deleted poem...	horus8 76.170.36.27	29-Jan-07/12:13 AM
I have a word for you "dunce".
Re: The Monday Hangover by Miggy	horus8 76.170.36.27	29-Jan-07/12:14 AM
The hand job.
regarding some deleted poem...	horus8 76.170.36.27	29-Jan-07/12:16 AM
Acne is no excuse for poor poetry.
regarding some deleted poem...	horus8 76.170.36.27	29-Jan-07/12:17 AM
Woah, you really have neo conservatists pinned here, asshat.
Re: Alternatives by Dovina	horus8 76.170.36.27	29-Jan-07/12:28 AM
I love how, overall, your position bobs as perfectly still as a cut and clear turd in a tsunami. So what you're saying is if we win we'd be right, and if we lose we can still say "I'm sorry, how's about a hug abdhula", and still be sort of okay sort of like maybe. okay in forgiveness, and just, well chatting about our issues. Like for one: America is babylon, the new atlantis, so you fucking rags and negroes, and wild eyed gooks have best understand, we will get your trees, your oil, your jewels and the little girls, so play ball ball, or possibly die, or be hugged.
regarding some deleted poem...	Christof 62.121.23.56	29-Jan-07/8:24 AM
I quite like the bit about the wood beetle. I don't really understand what you're driving at though.
regarding some deleted poem...	Christof 62.121.23.56	29-Jan-07/8:25 AM
Wordy, prosey, prolix. Reduce in lenghth by at least a half and try to put some music into your lines.
Re: The Passing by Stephen Robins	Christof 62.121.23.56	29-Jan-07/8:27 AM
This made me laugh. That is a good thing.
Re: Israel (Through The Eyes Of One Jewish Soul) by slana5	Christof 62.121.23.56	29-Jan-07/8:30 AM
The problems with this could all be sorted out by substituting the word 'ISRAEL' with the word 'NEWPORT PAGNELL'.
Re: The first time in forever by Jeremi B. Handrinos	Christof 62.121.23.56	29-Jan-07/8:34 AM
This is great - controlled, wry, well-paced, dispassionate but bursting with sadness. Lovely lovely stuff.
regarding some deleted poem...	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	29-Jan-07/8:36 AM
Such words as these, Were designed to please, Those who suffer, From homosexual disease.
Re: Alternatives by Dovina	richa 81.179.135.216	29-Jan-07/1:01 PM
Who do we admit defeat to. The other side resembles the volcano God. We placate it by being sufficiently beastly to the Jewish people and crossing our fingers that it will not erupt. We can't actually talk to it. And what is this technology? Is it a humane way of wasting people? The free range chicken method of genocide. We can only hope.