Re: Solving Freud's Conflict (not a weather poem) by nypoet22	richa 81.179.135.216	29-Jan-07/1:04 PM
Cute.
Re: Stream of Consciousness (#2) by MacFrantic	richa 81.179.135.216	29-Jan-07/1:17 PM
If this is your stream of consciousness you must think hella slow.
Re: Celebrity by horus8	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 75.214.77.62	29-Jan-07/1:34 PM
The Aladdin Hotel. Las Vegas. My room has a glass display case mounted on the wall. Inside, a silk tunic. The caption: "The Addams Family, Paramount Pictures 1991, Jimmy Workman as Pugsley Addams, Vest he wore in the film." Clearly I was at the bottom of the pile when they were distributing priceless memorabilia to all the rooms.
regarding some deleted poem...	Edna Sweetlove 85.210.225.200	30-Jan-07/2:10 AM
A most odd little contribution and one not without merit. Not very MUCH merit, of course, but still a little bit. I see you deny being an "alter ego" here. But I recognise your style (or lack thereof) vaguely. Who knows what the future may bring. What are you a doctor of, dear? Or is that mere affectation and vanity?
regarding some deleted poem...	pete 62.56.56.190	30-Jan-07/7:13 AM
struck a chord. didn-t see it as anti-bush, rather as anti the other lot ... guess there's not much difference
Re: Menopause by Stephen Robins	Ranger 62.252.32.15	30-Jan-07/7:16 AM
Do you really need the comma?
Re: The Monday Hangover by Miggy	Ranger 62.252.32.15	30-Jan-07/7:18 AM
"White dribbles colors what is a black plane" Disability and racism; two of poemranker's favourite topics -010-
regarding some deleted poem...	ecargo 167.219.88.140	30-Jan-07/7:30 AM
At the risk of reviving the tired "well, what IS poetry" debate--this reads like prose. As a first draft, it has some promise, but I'd definitely cut lots of words, make it less "sentence-y." Also, try rearranging passages/events--your last stanza might make a good starting point ("My journey if full of ice and discarded cars . . ."). It doesn't have to unfold in quite such a rigidly linear form. Welcome to the 'ranker. ;)
regarding some deleted poem...	ecargo 167.219.88.140	30-Jan-07/7:33 AM
Not bad, Mr. Mage. Poetry as masturbation. ;)
regarding some deleted poem...	ecargo 167.219.88.140	30-Jan-07/7:38 AM
I think the idea is a good one for a poem (end of innocence and all that), but you approach it too directly, I think, and the last line is too precious. Actually, rockmage's comment would make a decent poem on this subject with some editing: The chicken head at the bloody stump, a hatchet still in my hand. I was three. My first kill. It squawked [note: it couldn't squawk headless]pumping blood and ran after me until the blood ran out. The adults rolled about, laughing, more at my tears than the scene. It was my pet and my lesson on the difference between beasts and men.
Re: Menopause by Stephen Robins	ecargo 167.219.88.140	30-Jan-07/7:41 AM
Pleas. ap[p]les, alps flop, slap. eap.
regarding some deleted poem...	xxx 67.172.190.253	30-Jan-07/7:41 AM
Yeah! One idea carried through to the bitter end. A very nice bleak picture and excellent sick humor as well.
regarding some deleted poem...	Ranger 62.252.32.15	30-Jan-07/7:44 AM
I was playing Absolute Balderdash with some friends a while back, and one of the answers they came up with was 'A light source used in streetlamps'. I, of course, misinterpreted it as 'a light sauce used in streetlamps', and will swear for ever that that is the best image conceivable.
regarding some deleted poem...	Ranger 62.252.32.15	30-Jan-07/7:50 AM
For added irony, try some metre. 'Loci' is a great word to use in poetry, I must try it more often.
Re: Darkroom Dancer by MacFrantic	Ranger 62.252.32.15	30-Jan-07/8:04 AM
Not bad. Typo last word?
regarding some deleted poem...	Edna Sweetlove 85.210.252.16	30-Jan-07/11:56 AM
A bit unlikely stocking a public pond with bass.... I thought they were sea-fish?
Re: Blinking by zodiac	Edna Sweetlove 85.210.252.16	30-Jan-07/11:58 AM
Unexpected bit about your cock. Have to give you marks for that one, dearie.
Re: becoming by <~>	Edna Sweetlove 85.210.252.16	30-Jan-07/12:04 PM
When I read bollocks like "inexists" I reach for the zero score button................. And it gets worse. God almighty. This is NOT a pimple, it's an oozing pus-filled sore.
regarding some deleted poem...	Edna Sweetlove 85.210.252.16	30-Jan-07/12:05 PM
Wanking can be fun, I suppose. Better than verbal puking.
Re: a voice poem by richa	Ranger 62.252.32.15	30-Jan-07/12:33 PM
'The' happens far too much for me; excellent otherwise.