Re: Stained by fadedlove	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	19-Jan-07/8:53 AM
A poem of such importance as this should have a special display case manufactured. And the sign attached to that display case should be annotated with the simple, yet powerful words: "Here are words of such crushingly strong significance that to read them is to stare at one's own reflection and see to the very core of one's soul. I caution you reader that once read you will never look upon the hollow husk of your former life without feeling a jolt of sorrow for the unenlightened former you which cowered like some kind of terribly liquidised mollusc in a puddle of ignorance." - 8 -
Re: Give it up Max by Stephen Robins	Edna Sweetlove 85.210.201.5	19-Jan-07/9:00 AM
I don't know to whom you refer with "cute critters"; but rhyming shitter with it is very fine indeed. And well worthy of a 6.
Re: Holy Tits by Holy Tits	Edna Sweetlove 85.210.201.5	19-Jan-07/9:02 AM
This indeed has a very fine poetic flow to it. May I suggest you comment on your lover's dandruff too? And one thing about bald patches is that you can see how filthy the scalp is. You can spot headlice more easily as well. I think I feel a poem coming on about this subject....................
regarding some deleted poem...	Edna Sweetlove 85.210.201.5	19-Jan-07/9:05 AM
Only spoiled by the last line. Maybe a reference to Preparation H and shitter-probing is needed?
regarding some deleted poem...	Edna Sweetlove 85.210.201.5	19-Jan-07/9:06 AM
I don't get the reference, but I always love insults about fat Americans and their greed and lardy obesity.
Re: Ben Fogle by Stephen Robins	Edna Sweetlove 85.210.201.5	19-Jan-07/9:09 AM
Sounds a bit light that old cunt, Big Ears Windsor.
regarding some deleted poem...	Edna Sweetlove 85.210.201.5	19-Jan-07/9:10 AM
Top class stuff. Sophisticated and erudite. I smiled.
regarding some deleted poem...	Edna Sweetlove 85.210.201.5	19-Jan-07/9:11 AM
Sadly, the bastards earn quite a lot of money. My own accountant is a total dreary cunt.
regarding some deleted poem...	Edna Sweetlove 85.210.201.5	19-Jan-07/9:12 AM
The best thing to delay orgasm when screwing a lady is to think of your own wife's wizened arse.
Re: Wreck of the Poor Anchor by Dovina	Edna Sweetlove 85.210.201.5	19-Jan-07/9:13 AM
A bit long.
Re: Wreck of the Poor Anchor by Dovina	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 206.228.170.72	19-Jan-07/9:35 AM
I went to an Indian restaurant last night on 100th & Broadway, and I swear to God my friend's vindaloo had a monkey egg in it. It was about the size of a ping pong ball, brown, with an outer shell, and some kind of nut inside. It smelt of anise. It wasn't fresh so I'm guessing it was laid in India somewhere and transported to New York in a tupperware container. We discarded it and continued with our meal. -3-
regarding some deleted poem...	xxx 67.172.190.253	19-Jan-07/6:04 PM
You are your mess. I am not sure you know what poetry is. Have you looked the word up?
Re: Molecules of Paint by Dovina	some deleted user 64.140.228.114	19-Jan-07/9:45 PM
Wow! And you said I was wordy. Only kidding Dovina--this is very good work. Strong metaphors and similes push it along nicely. I have to admit that I'm a sucker for poems about nature and this is one of the best I've seen on this site. It is also a poem about home. I've never been to Tennessee, but the picture you paint reminds me of my own home in New Hampshire. Thanks for sharing.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dental Panic 84.27.81.27	20-Jan-07/4:49 AM
I think you're a genius.
Re: The road to my Saturday by Enkidu	Dovina 75.82.85.162	20-Jan-07/3:57 PM
A pretty dismal prospect, this. And why be so sure the road is damned? Oh, they all are - ok. But what about Sunday? Really, this is quite unclear to me.
Re: Body Worlds by Dental Panic	Dovina 75.82.85.162	20-Jan-07/4:15 PM
It’s not possible to leave out 200 words, maybe one though – “well.” I had to look up Plastination, and will save the rest of you dummies the trouble: http://app1.chinadaily.com.cn/star/2001/0913/fe19-1.html An interesting process, and a good poem.
Re: Molecules of Paint by Dovina	Ranger 86.140.66.243	21-Jan-07/3:13 AM
This is pretty good actually. The images are well-crafted and effective. It needs a more careful second read though. I'll come back later. Metrically, I like it mostly, although some places need reworking ('crimson/Artistes' etc.). rockmage might have a point about there being too many words though, ones like 'while', 'now', 'then' can probably be edited out or replaced. 'spec' = 'speck'? 'resignly' = 'resignedly'? Love the final stanza :-)
Re: the gods of rook and man by richa	Ranger 86.140.66.243	21-Jan-07/3:24 AM
Yes. Punctuate the final line?
Re: Body Worlds by Dental Panic	Ranger 86.140.66.243	21-Jan-07/3:27 AM
Damn good, have you been to the exhibit?
Re: The road to my Saturday by Enkidu	Ranger 86.140.66.243	21-Jan-07/3:28 AM
Quite clearly about being drunk in Miskin Street on a Saturday night.