Bill Z Bub
on Bad habits & tramps by horus8
6 Jun 2003, 5:00 PM
ya, I can see it. I can smell it. I can dig it.
mmmmmmm, good luck broth with a side of placenta.
GQT award. Fucking awesome poem, hands down.
solid.
Col. Mustard in the Bedroom with the Wank Harness.
You have more sides to you than a cuboid, good show !
If you have moment please spend a peekaboo at my latests my dear.
Thank you.
This is nothing NOTHING before the sheer blood-chilling TERROR of GHOST IN A JAR!
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what is the point of this poem?? the truth of death is that she lived slightly before she dies?
i see no purpose in this....degradation of poetry.
also, "ultra-sharp" does not do it for me as an, ahem, adjective.
When you leave your house, do you even bother with clothes?
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1. "Slip down the hour glass of life" change down to through.
2. hourglass, is one word.
3. "Each others heart" Each-other's.
4. my suggestion is pull the poem into tight stanzas, use commas and periods, or capitals or lowercase to show sentence and thought seperation. Do not space. Make it like 4 to 6 stanzas. And remove the stuff at the bottom, because, we are already aware that you need guidance. Try not to start your sentences with and or but, and ignore the fact that I do it all the time. Remove the asterick. Make your title a sentence, don't capitalize each word, and there you have it. Oh, try to use words that are a tad bit rarer than the nouns, verbs and adjectives you are using now, check your thesaurus. For instance "
Not enough time
To fill the heart and mind
With memories made too brief"
This could be said like this;
There is never enough time
to ease a heart or mind
as memories displace remembering.
(click) goes the numerator.
Interesting, especially if the reader is unaware of the situation. I think it's a perfect definition. It made me smile, that's always good.
Speaking without Knowledge, isn't that what your mocking me for here? I do Happen to know about Libel and Slander, and copyright protections. I may not be a lawyer but as a DJ for a radio station I have to know about such things.
So next time you assume someone has no clue what the hell they are talking about, make sure they don't.
Is the question "Tea?"?
Waiting at the kitchen table to tell someone off is one of the worst things in the world.
Death metal lyrics only have a point when accompanied by actual death metal.
people just don't listen, do they?
Oh me oh my. Best thing all day.
Great! Where's the mp3?