some deleted user
on Mother by sk8rs_rule_all
9 May 2003, 6:42 PM
cuz u could do better
Oh yeah... Now that's addiction. Yesterday, I saw a pack of Setraline addicts destroying a neighbors bike basket and rose bush. The look in their eyes was terrifying almost even heart stopping, but then I realized I hadn't taken my methadone, and perhaps had been a bit quick to judge.
Friday the thirteenth part whatever.
dude, pretty wicked gyno-rage. did some chick mess up your laura ashley sheets?. if so, was it worth it?
o god and i thought i sucked
Yes i enjoyed that
sweet, good flow
Yes i enjoyed that
sweet, good flow
oookk i know i dont have any room to talk since i havent logged in for like about 3 or 4 months but this takes the cake for the best/worst poem i ahve ever read. i am not sure wether to all it good or wether to call it bad because im sure of this: If i rate it 10 and say it is a great poem, on one of my ratings im sure to get from horus: ''you dont know what great it you are just some little bitch who still attends school and you cant write for jack so if i were you i would stop writing right now''. and im sure if i put something bad like: god horus your poems suck maybe you should stop writing you are just some gay fag who writes about his time on the street begging for mone to pay for his hospital bill because he got aids from some 'fag' on the street i am sure to get this kind of response on one of my poems horus: ''u little whore it is none of your business what i do and who i am'' and just on and on and on and on until finally i have to leave poemrankers or i have to do something drastic to make him/her stop so after thinking of all the possiblities of what could happen to me in the future for putting a negative/good comment i will rate him a 5 for it is between 10 and 1. Hopefully he dosent take the time to read my pointless comment and just browses around through the other ones and dosent think twice to read mine! I can only hope.
good but lacks potential....i shouldn;t be talking but i know how it feels to be put down because of writing but then again who the hell are people to be judging your 'art' as i would call it. all the poems i write i call them my art...why you ask well..because i have no other thing to do and i write my feeling as i feel them. They may not make sense to some people but to others they understand what i was thinking at the moment of creating the poem and they can relate to me..and those who cant relate to me they give me bad ratings..so think of it thise way i can connect with you on this one but dont think im going to let you get away with a 10 next time!
I would say "great use of 'talk' to rhyme with 'walk'" but honestly! This HAS to be a joke. Good 1! "and don't forget about mob" -- genius.
I feel you could extend this song a little because each verse is a little too long, but overall, it's a good song (9)
Yes bob dylas an influence to me, like the stuff about reasons to live/ earthquake shelters/ pipelines
Like the second verse, quite clever.
and perceptive too
Specifically, unspecific, and better off for it.
some deleted user
on some deleted poem
9 May 2003, 11:25 AM
Nice job. I can see this working as a song. -9-
On a serious level the poem is almost grate! Grateful for rathering to die of course. the last line and title take away from it.
Shit.