You need some concrete. To grind off that chrome.

Your write funny stuff and really sad stuff, this moistened my boxers pretty funny

I thought this Poem was good..

And I liked this one better than the first...

Superb, yes, we do.

lol.

Here here!!!!! no easy task, I'm sure. My dad had a retirement party this weekend. geezers are funny.

"weap" I weap a book? nay. otherwise, fine.

nutty, but on point

no. make a haiku for the utensil drawer.

Again a nice twist...though it does get a little repetitive before you get there...

Jomegan?... The meter needs a little work...but the idea and rhyme are good.

This is one of your best poems that I have seen. It definitely gets my approval. Nice job.

When I read this I thought my oh my this damsel seems lost between a loyalty to the rhyme scheme and the narrative. My dear experiment with both avoiding each for each poem e.g write a poem purely on rhyme or story not both. You are eager and an aspiring writer with potential but focus is all you need, then really go for the subject matter with your best literary gusto. 6

Wonderful conclusion, it reminded me of the finale of the Shawshank Redemption, did you watch it my dear boy? 8

Captivating and signatory of what I expect from a duly talented young lady. I envy the way you sew your words together and the fact you inspire GW endorses you as a jolly good writer. 09

I've seen you do better. I know this has a deeper message but you could have written it a little differently to portray it in a way that would have been more powerful. My advice is to keep the good idea and try again in a different style.

I am amused, and think I know of the mans identity.

Bloody vulgar you have no shame you scoundrel.

awe-inspiring (*10*)