I would love you to read a poem Richa wrote about butterflies, wonderful language, it inspired me for my next poem. Sorry if one appears a fringe intrusive, just trying to help you, because I think your a gentleman.

Religion huh?.....think the astros or the drunk poets changing our world was a better subject now.

This is supposed to be a poem........hahahaha

why didn'u just get pops arressted for child molesting instead of writing this crap?

If the english crap wasn't ennough now we have spanish shit as well. Buenos Aires eh?....I suppose with the country already screwed up u going there wouldn't do much harm. Mayb u could write something for Maradona while ur at it.....prob the best thing from there after sabatini

I see the tenderness of age in your work. As you become more life experienced your writing will evolve as it is with your work at present, the naivity somewhat burdens any serious writing. We've all been there though so keep your pecker up. 5 I would be grateful if you would look at mine and offer me your views, Thank you.

February's mother is cold and unforgiving, not like mine thank goodness. I like the line of the indian wind, I too have used similar connotations in my poem lovers lane, your work is often majestic but sometimes I think by shortening some of your work you deprive us of enough. Its hard to put more light on it, what do you think kind sir? 7

A good try at the suicide genre but the repetition and use of cliches adds nothing to our imagination as its a tell all poem, however I bequeath thee a 6.

the last two stanzas seem like they r from another poem......what the hell is going on?.

Gosh i love break-ups....at least they're honest.Liked the part bout the heart and facts

What really amuses me is ppl like u who think revolutions r gonna take place cos of what some drunkard/junkie/both thinks and writes.Wake up.....Action not words. Tho the poem would've really been appropriate mayb 100 years ago

Joey go overdose o heroin or something before u get strangled by Love.....lol

Man....first a crappy game like baseball...second a shitty team like the astros....hope part 2 is leess crappy

The first stanza or most of it sounds like a teen wet dream......but considering ur a high school wannabe poet....can't blame ya..the second stanza is less worse tho....gives u 2 for being a whore

Stupid's the word alright......will give u a 2 for hoonesty tho

How does one pray with all there might? I am interested because surely one would injure ones self.

What the fuck is this fascination with vampires?.......i say kill em wherever u find any bloodsucking lowlifes

Why didn't u just kill him and do urself and a lotta other women a gr8 favor?

Silly Fancy Poem

Oh yeah as if they care what u think........hahahaha