regarding some deleted poem...	daggatolar 82.128.11.128	19-Dec-06/10:00 PM
some good measure of a pain makes out poetry to be good...how love can become the same hate..is the fault that of poetry, when all there is to poetry is poetry, to therefore demand answers from poetry and not life is like Ares muscle up humnaity to safe life only for the animal reign of destruction to in the end be... a good play of dialectics, though headside down and legside up of Hegels not Marx correction ... gooder than good
regarding some deleted poem...	daggatolar 82.128.11.128	19-Dec-06/10:07 PM
you extremely rich full of dialectics ... i want owe your collction in my hand ....be sure i would read everything you post... again how can dialectics the very matter of nature not make any poem good... except...?
Re: Then things forgotten inside by Prince of Void	daggatolar 82.128.11.128	19-Dec-06/10:10 PM
you don't find them... you don't find a poem...
Re: Cornerstones by polaroidmemory	daggatolar 82.128.11.128	19-Dec-06/10:30 PM
"I am willing to try", if only all others can in the same spirit uphold...then we can bring Heaven down to Mother earth... abeg thematically tight... who can then care for "cliches" and "metaphors"...
regarding some deleted poem...	howl 81.178.70.203	23-Dec-06/3:02 PM
Here too as in the other hemisphere/ are metal jungles is close to working. I have a couple of problems: (i) the other hemisphere-- I tend to view jungles as being in the tropics rather than part of a given hemisphere (ii)metal jungles [too]-- are you comparing two metal jungles. If you are it is difficult to ascertain which particular places you are comparing.
Re: Advent by Nicholas Jones	howl 81.178.70.203	23-Dec-06/3:12 PM
Sounds like something the wretched Dovina would write. It is all tell and not show.
Re: soft candy by skaskowski	MacFrantic 71.237.26.195	25-Dec-06/10:49 AM
I loved this before and it's still good revised.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 208.127.72.169	28-Dec-06/3:01 PM
It does seem like a prank.
Re: "incomplete" by Prince of Void	Dovina 208.127.72.169	28-Dec-06/3:04 PM
Made with a void - how sad. But how comforting when a void is filled. The shape of a void is the reverse of the thing that fits there.
Re: Moving On by MacFrantic	Dovina 208.127.72.169	28-Dec-06/3:07 PM
The rhythm and rhyme are so good that the lapses glare.
Re: Cloche. by howl	Prince of Void 87.107.15.20	31-Dec-06/8:48 AM
keep going on ..it's very cinematic
Re: Fanatic by Dovina	Prince of Void 87.107.15.20	31-Dec-06/9:04 AM
he shoud know he's running out of time open up, surrender to the plot when a cold wind blew on this day we looked the other way tomorrow we might find the answers lay in riverbeds and dust we believed sth beyond the beauty and order our great city of vision lost in this beautiful choas
Re: My Heart by unouluvme	Dovina 75.82.85.162	1-Jan-07/11:56 AM
The title seems distant from the subject, makes me wonder who or what is buried.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 75.82.85.162	1-Jan-07/11:57 AM
Too much vague telling here. I'm just not with it.
Re: Happy birthday to myself by Prince of Void	Dovina 75.82.85.162	1-Jan-07/12:16 PM
So many grammar glitches here, I have to wonder if the few correct phrases are mistakes in a dialect of hopelessness.
Re: Happy birthday to myself by Prince of Void	Ranger 62.252.32.15	2-Jan-07/1:17 AM
Happy birthday indeed
regarding some deleted poem...	Ranger 62.252.32.15	2-Jan-07/1:25 AM
Dovina's got a point about the vagueness, I'm afraid. Slender moments failing? How do moments fail? Mortality's dust falling is quite a good idea in a post-apocalyptic way. You could turn this into a pseudo-biblical style piece to accommodate the language (epoch, eon, halcyon etc.) as it seems a little OTT as it is. As an aside, Redhill isn't a million miles from my home, although I can't remember having ever been there.
Re: Russian absinthe by AlexandraLeaving	Ranger 62.252.32.15	2-Jan-07/1:26 AM
I quite like this and I don't know why.
Re: Fanatic by Dovina	Ranger 62.252.32.15	2-Jan-07/1:31 AM
Love the last stanza and like the idea within 'greenly', although I hate the word itself. 'Factuality' really doesn't sit well as a line end, 'fact' would do just as well for me. Too many uses of 'he'; maybe you're trying to show his idealistic egocentrism, but it sits awkwardly with me. Still effective though. Happy New Year :-)
regarding some deleted poem...	Ranger 62.252.32.15	2-Jan-07/1:33 AM
This is good. I like the stop-start beat but it could be altered here and there.